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yash_kant
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I have read the initial chapters and I like how the story is setup with a non-mainstream theme of 'Mafia'. The established world of the novel has lot of potential for exciting development. Also the main protagonist is neither OP nor to lack in power, with a good contrasting personality trait which give a plus point to this novel. If the author focuses on main story without much overloading the chapter with unimportant stuff, the novel will become much more exciting. It will definitely grew into top rank novel.

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Destiny_Aitsuji
Destiny_AitsujiAuthorDestiny_Aitsuji

Could you elaborate what you think is unimportant stuff?

yash_kant
yash_kantLv2yash_kant

By unimportant things I mean there are too much explanations and details that are hogging the chapters with little main story progress. I have read first 10 chapters but MC has not used his main ability at even once. Whereas, even a complete chapter is devoted for MC reading only 2 massages from inbox. These things waters down the effect of thrill and excitement which reader is expecting from the story. It need a lot of patience for a reader to not loose interest if nothing exciting is happening particularly at the start of the novel. You are a very good author with good imagination but if novel cannot bound a reader, then your talent is inefficiently used.

Destiny_Aitsuji:Could you elaborate what you think is unimportant stuff?
Destiny_Aitsuji
Destiny_AitsujiAuthorDestiny_Aitsuji

Thank you or clarification. I would like to take this chance to introduce myself to you. As a writer who was trained under a traditionally published mentor, my writing style will conflict greatly with many webnovel readers looking for mainstream cheap thrills and plot progression. I came from a background of competition writing and fanfiction with a considerable fan base that did not follow me because of genre switches. While I understand that disappointment in some of the readers, I will not be changing my style. I don't know if you would continue to stay for the rest of the story but thank you for thinking it was interesting enough to read till at least chapter 10 and rating it highly. This is clearly a niche work and not a mainstream one. I have a feeling you're leaning more towards a mainstream reader. Fortunately for you, there are countless mainstream webnovels introduced by good writers in the WSA competition that I've mostly given up on. Regardless, it was nice hearing from someone who picked up this book liking the concept that I knew would not do well on Webnovel. As such, I will be moving this book to Tapas after season 1 ends at chapter 53 and the advanced chapters to Patreon solely.

yash_kant:By unimportant things I mean there are too much explanations and details that are hogging the chapters with little main story progress. I have read first 10 chapters but MC has not used his main ability at even once. Whereas, even a complete chapter is devoted for MC reading only 2 massages from inbox. These things waters down the effect of thrill and excitement which reader is expecting from the story. It need a lot of patience for a reader to not loose interest if nothing exciting is happening particularly at the start of the novel. You are a very good author with good imagination but if novel cannot bound a reader, then your talent is inefficiently used.