Review Detail of Time_Zekrom_4361 in My Faᵵe System
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The writing quality is smooth and breathtaking to read. I am hoping for daily uploads if possible but we will see in the coming days or when the author responds. The story development is moving smoothly but there are some occasionally parts of the story that felt off. The character design is vague right now but I just hope he doesn't go making enemies left and right (you know young masters out there XD). As for the world background, it still developing so I suggest giving more info about the world and spread more evenly in the coming chapters so it doesn't become a massive info dump chapter!!! (Currently waiting for new chapter on chapter 23) Anway, amazing read so author don't stop!!!
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MellowGuy
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Hi! Thank you so much for the lovely review! The upload rate right now isn't daily because this novel is still being processed to be contracted! As soon as that happens, I promise a daily release rate! :) As for the world's background, I plan on giving it as Nikolai goes through different ventures. You'll see the world as Nikolai tries to reap the benefits of his ability and knowledge! You mentioned a part of the story that felt off, can you specify? I'll be focusing more on it to make it clear in the next chapters! Thank you for reading!
The one thing that felt off is when he decides to be a hero and attempt to change the fate of the crazy doctor/save the children which got him into a huge mess. I thought he was going to meticulous and plan things out but he rushed head-on and got caught. In the future, the Mc should disguise or keep his identity a secret with a fake alias in certain circumstances so he doesn't get targeted left and right and try to keep his identity as mysterious as possible.
MellowGuy:Hi! Thank you so much for the lovely review! The upload rate right now isn't daily because this novel is still being processed to be contracted! As soon as that happens, I promise a daily release rate! :) As for the world's background, I plan on giving it as Nikolai goes through different ventures. You'll see the world as Nikolai tries to reap the benefits of his ability and knowledge! You mentioned a part of the story that felt off, can you specify? I'll be focusing more on it to make it clear in the next chapters! Thank you for reading!
He was after those fate points and he made it clear when he asked the kids to do great things xD But yes I will work on establishing his motives better. Thank you!!
Time_Zekrom_4361:The one thing that felt off is when he decides to be a hero and attempt to change the fate of the crazy doctor/save the children which got him into a huge mess. I thought he was going to meticulous and plan things out but he rushed head-on and got caught. In the future, the Mc should disguise or keep his identity a secret with a fake alias in certain circumstances so he doesn't get targeted left and right and try to keep his identity as mysterious as possible.