don't overcomplicate sentences, make it simple if you can. i want to read novel, not study journal. it's uncomfortable to read. i just skim through the chapter. 10 chaps is all i can do. the first few chapters are good, it gone downhill after mc transmigration(?) to the past, i don't know why, i just lost the will to read the rest, it's just felt uncomfortable to read. it has good potential. my advice is, let your friend read it first before posting it in WN
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