Review Detail of Martial_Pursuit in Savage: The Night Wizard - (A Harry Potter Fanfic)

everything is cringe in this, the OPMC is annoying already, the martial art that the character learn make no sense it's obvious the school is a MC Dojo getting a black belt before 12 years old not even prodigy is given that before they reach an appropriate age in a real Dojo. the dialog is just unnatural, might as well get rid of the family and start em at the orphanage. 50 chapter in is nothing but info dumb are you writing a story or a fucking wiki author. why does every single fanfic need to be in a first person, does any of you aware how hard it is to write this way, why not using a limited third person that way you are t going to be stuck info dumping on us reader.