Review Detail of Changen4125 in Savage: The Night Wizard - (A Harry Potter Fanfic)
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50 chapters in and there is nothing but info dumps. It reads more like a wiki than a story. If it's suppose to be a slice of life then make about a slice of life, but instead we are a fed a drivel of facts and history instead of a story. It's like having Hermione in your ears telling you about her day.
Savage: The Night Wizard - (A Harry Potter Fanfic)
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This is reading more and more like a Gary Stu in HP than anything else. advice to the author: read about Chekhov's gun. If you show something to the readers then you need to use it. Otherwise, it's bad writing. The only thing of interest is the diary he found and after 3 chapters of it, nothing of interests has happened. Same with the classes, he's good at everything and yet it has done nothing. You don't need 10+ chapters of 8 different classes of telling us that he's good at studying or magic...we already know. All it does is drag out everything and slows down the pace of the story (if there is any) for no reason.
