Review Detail of Jakotheshadows in Marvel's Superman [Completed]

It's a real drag to read. I'll admit I hold most stories to high standards which are probably unrealistic for fanfics so I tried to go easy on this one. But there are just certain phrases that really get on my nerves. "The diamond-like hard sparkling appearance still couldn't cover up her fragile heart." "The Ancient One paused and took a few glances at Superman, who was physically strong and exuded a masculine aura, and seriously said,' you might get sucked dry by her'." "The thirsty eyes, the desire, were almost overflowing". There's more but I'm not gonna go through 170+ chapters to look through all of them. These were from about 20 chapters. The editing/proofreading(assuming there is editing) is lackluster with clear issues slipping through every couple of paras. The plot kinda meander's along and since he essentially knows everything? So he just avoids any serious plot points as well as character development through the 170+ chapters I read. The characters are pretty monotonous and the dialogue is dreadful.