Hello and an honest review from me. There's a repetitive sentences and you should break down the long paragraphs, and also the dialogues so the readers won't get confused. But overall, your story was good👍🏻
icyrage39
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Thank you Rin_Nurnia😄 I'll try to correct that👍 I'm happy you liked it
thank you 😊 for the review i'll try to break down the long paragraphs next time