Review Detail of kuhaku_sora in [Null]

As a fello author, I cannot stress enough my love for reading isekai stories. You have cool concept about world that has nothing to give. The usual things that makes the isekai interesting is not existing in your worl; and that makes it more intriguing. Althoug this may be hard for you to explain in detail, I wish you my best regards for your story! No. Like other books, you need to improve on your vocabulary. There are few words that have been repeated that slightly lacks the metaphor. Always remmeber that the readers must visualise the description of your story through words! Also-this is more than a style of writing-you might want to enhance the conversation of the characters. Something like, "Hey, George. What's up!" A random voice calls my name from a distance. I turn around and see a familiar man wearing his ragged jeans and sweaty shirt oozing with bla bla bla Make it more natural. It will make your novel 1 billion percent better than the novels out there!