Review Detail of Alcibiades in I'm The supreme Fairy King

Item: I'm The supreme Fairy King
Rating: 3

Review detail

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50 chapters in and this novel reads like it was written in a different language and then machine translated into english with some editing. This shows in specific areas like where the author says something to the effect of “I did no felony to you” to which the other person responds with something like “You did do a felony to me.” There are plenty more examples like the MC being called a “Lamp” abruptly in the first few chapters with little explanation of what that is. I suspect the author meant “guide” or “scout.” Story is quite unclear (in an unintentional way) with the author trying to introduce new elements (characters, details, thoughts) without explaining them (just throwing them in there). Dropped with no regrets, the positive reviews seem suspicious as this novel is nowhere near 4+ stars. Maybe a 3 at most.

I'm The supreme Fairy King

ranmaro

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Hi there. As you read the novel and wrote some good points about the story so I'm here to clarify things out. First I write in English directly, but as I'm not a native, some issues will be found like you mentioned above. With such comments I tend to change and edit all things highlighted to me. So thanks for pointing such phrase and I'll edit it later. Also there is an editor working on my novels, but compared to the large number of my current novels and my daily writings of a lot of chapters, he can't keep up with my progress and still busy with some novels. Of course this is something you can ditch away and I can understand that. As for the other point, and it's the point I'm answering on your review for, is the dilemma of show and don't tell in writing. See, I wrote this novel while testing out many writing techniques. Some might work and some won't. For example, the "Lamp" word here is used as a description for the mc to act as a decoy, which should be guessed from the reactions of others and the words of the leader of the bandit group. But against that famous rule, and from many comments I've seen like yours, it seems to better tell directly everything, narrate what big editors used to call "on the nose" way of writing instead of writing in the more complicated way of showing and not telling and giving the readers the credit to deduct some things and not spoon fed. Anyway this is just me ranting about this, and as a reader you don't need to know any of such specifications and complications, but I guessed you and others should know. At least you'll know I'm not writing mere words to fill the page and there is a great amount of effort done behind the curtain. Despite it all went to nothing at the end, unfortunately for you and me. As for the other reviews, they are all genuine and expressed the thoughts of other readers. Despite some issues you and others might find, other readers would neglect or didn't notice such things and keep on reading, amused by the story itself. And as an author I should stand out for them and express my thanks to their positive feedbacks as well I'm doing this to your feedback here. Thanks for giving such a detailed review, as I learnt something from the words of you. You helped in solving a dilemma of writing to me and that alone worth a big thanks and my deep appreciation. Ranmaro

3yr

Draky_VampireLv2Draky_Vampire

I did the same thing as you and I failed as well... Then I adopted to show and tell at the same time...😆

ranmaro:Hi there. As you read the novel and wrote some good points about the story so I'm here to clarify things out. First I write in English directly, but as I'm not a native, some issues will be found like you mentioned above. With such comments I tend to change and edit all things highlighted to me. So thanks for pointing such phrase and I'll edit it later. Also there is an editor working on my novels, but compared to the large number of my current novels and my daily writings of a lot of chapters, he can't keep up with my progress and still busy with some novels. Of course this is something you can ditch away and I can understand that. As for the other point, and it's the point I'm answering on your review for, is the dilemma of show and don't tell in writing. See, I wrote this novel while testing out many writing techniques. Some might work and some won't. For example, the "Lamp" word here is used as a description for the mc to act as a decoy, which should be guessed from the reactions of others and the words of the leader of the bandit group. But against that famous rule, and from many comments I've seen like yours, it seems to better tell directly everything, narrate what big editors used to call "on the nose" way of writing instead of writing in the more complicated way of showing and not telling and giving the readers the credit to deduct some things and not spoon fed. Anyway this is just me ranting about this, and as a reader you don't need to know any of such specifications and complications, but I guessed you and others should know. At least you'll know I'm not writing mere words to fill the page and there is a great amount of effort done behind the curtain. Despite it all went to nothing at the end, unfortunately for you and me. As for the other reviews, they are all genuine and expressed the thoughts of other readers. Despite some issues you and others might find, other readers would neglect or didn't notice such things and keep on reading, amused by the story itself. And as an author I should stand out for them and express my thanks to their positive feedbacks as well I'm doing this to your feedback here. Thanks for giving such a detailed review, as I learnt something from the words of you. You helped in solving a dilemma of writing to me and that alone worth a big thanks and my deep appreciation. Ranmaro

2yr