It was a pleasant read. The story lends itself to the probability of having a good world-building pace in the future. The characters themselves were interesting and it was fairly well written. There is good conciseness in word usage. With that said, there is room for improvement in terms of grammar and pacing of paragraphs. The paragraphs need to appear cleaner so readers can read more easily. I would suggest downloading Grammarly since authors are susceptible to grammar mistakes. Trust me, it takes your writing to a whole new level. Overall, it is a solid story with good potential. Keep up the good work!
Necroghan
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