Review Detail of The_Mad_Titan in Unflag:Deity's Game?

I won't give this anything less than three stars cause of how motivated you are to learn and better your writing. I still think it could use a little work though, but the story concept is nice. what did bother me was the constant use of onomatopoeic words (*poof*, *thud*) Like when he took out the map, you could've described it in a better way? But the synopsis immediately drew me in and it's still to early to say much, but i like this so far.