I like this story. It doesn't fear jumping into the action and creating chaotic and intriguing situations that come very well into this genre. The MC is interesting and when she talks, it's because she's got something interesting to say. You could try to split the big paragraphs into smaller ones for easier readier digestion, but I see no other problems with this story. Good job!
Kay Lillyt
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