Amazing plot! I love how detailed and descriptive you are. You really know how to paint a picture with words. Just as a little feedback though, I suggest fixing up the punctuations a bit. Avoid having way too lengthy run-on sentences with too many commas, because readers may lose track when they move to the next line. But other than that, awesome job!
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