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Review Detail of TheArcher7 in Affinity:Chaos

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TheArcher7
TheArcher7Lv122yrTheArcher7

All around this story is average. It's a cultivation novel with typical cliches and a few typical features, but I haven't seen anything new yet. Sometimes that's good, because you just want to have an enjoyable read, and indeed some people love how "fast paced" the novel is, but not me. The grammar is near flawless but the author's command of the English language is lacking. Moments seem to drag on forever and the writing seems to circle itself in a repetitive manner. These things happen mostly due to a bland, unvarried word choice. For readers like me, with higher expectations, I'm simply bored from reading it. Plot-wise the story is average too. The world building doesnt seem very deep and there aren't very many characters, as if the author doesnt want to put the work in to making a large world. The time period and cultures aren't established (with either the use of objects, technology, or references). Nothing. Furthermore the magic system is lacking. Even by chapter 30, when the MC has broken through two planes, I still dont know what the planes are, what the consequences of cultivating improperly are, what the elements are, or how the elements are used (in combat) ect. Even by chapter 30 there has been only one fight and it was totally lackluster. Missed opportunity for demonstrating the magic system in action. Over all I would say average. I am still very impressed with the grammar, but there's unfortunately no character or charm to the writing. So even though it isn't distracting from the story, it is still detracting. Author should go back to rework scenes and actively use synonyms. Every adjective in a chapter should be unique. Every verb should be specifically chosen to best describe an action.

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TheArcher7
TheArcher7Lv12TheArcher7

I'm currently at chapter 56. We are right in the middle of a tournament arc, however it is being used improperly. A tournament is supposed to be used to introduce new characters, give depth to old characters, and/or showcase everyone's abilities and their relationships with each other. However none of this is done. The fights are short and barely add anything to the story. The MC and his goons (ahem, I mean friends) wipe the floor, and the author even portrays it as "a waste of time that could be spent training." I see it as a missed opportunity.

Lordfifth14372
Lordfifth14372Lv4Lordfifth14372

you said pretty much what I was feeling about this story. I read until around chapter 40 world building is next none. there is no explanation on power system as well, difference between each plane etc. Being elementalist and all he uses a knife to kill big

JOSH_ONE
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read Cultivator King, you won't be disappointed

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nebula
nebulaLv13nebula

honestly, as someone completely up to date I could say just hold on because it gets a lot better, but there is no point. You should not have to "get through" the beginning of a story before it gets good as the author improves(as in this book), even though it is a huge problem on this website/app in general. All I can say is that some(not all) of your gripes are dealt with over time, and that if you did choose to carry on at some point, it does, whether unfortunately or fortunately, get better. Sorry if I am being inconsiderate of your view or ignorant and misunderstanding, I just thought I would give my two pence as I have been enjoying this book quite a lot recently, despite the gradually decreasing number and length of chapters.

Epholso
EpholsoLv2Epholso

You wont even get to the point it gets better because the premium chapters kick in beforehand.

nebula:honestly, as someone completely up to date I could say just hold on because it gets a lot better, but there is no point. You should not have to "get through" the beginning of a story before it gets good as the author improves(as in this book), even though it is a huge problem on this website/app in general. All I can say is that some(not all) of your gripes are dealt with over time, and that if you did choose to carry on at some point, it does, whether unfortunately or fortunately, get better. Sorry if I am being inconsiderate of your view or ignorant and misunderstanding, I just thought I would give my two pence as I have been enjoying this book quite a lot recently, despite the gradually decreasing number and length of chapters.