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Review Detail of NightWind in The Challenger's Return: Rebirth of the Rainbow Mage

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NightWind
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Thank you for reading my book. It's my first novel, and I'm still learning, so I give four stars! Here's what you can expect: The Good The story flows well, and grammar and sentence issues are minimal. Otto, the MC, is smart, ruthless, pragmatic, rational, and powerful. He loves his schemes, but is NOT a genius, an edge lord, a simp, or omnipotent. Each floor could lead to an entirely new world! The worlds are unique, and feel real...this is not a copy cat novel hehe The Bad Pacing! It starts fast but slows down too much...something to work on No romance... POV shifts could be introduced and inserted better. There are moments where it may seem contrived...this is my first story so I'm working on this too All in all, I hope you can give it a chance.... I don't think you'll regret it!!!

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The Challenger's Return: Rebirth of the Rainbow Mage

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Gowtham_Selvarajan
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good so far keep up the good work

AADucxter_42069
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how dare you not put romance!!!!!!

AADucxter_42069
AADucxter_42069Lv5AADucxter_42069

well its your novel the synopsis looks good gonna try it

gabe_pom
gabe_pomLv3gabe_pom

Great story so far, keep up the good work.

SavageGamer
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very humble author 👍

Samuel_Morrison
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cool idea repost this under another name so some people dont have to spend fast passes on this and limit it to a select number by putting it somewhere most dont go

Samuel_Morrison
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maybe in comment cause of so few likes or replys

Samuel_Morrison:cool idea repost this under another name so some people dont have to spend fast passes on this and limit it to a select number by putting it somewhere most dont go
Orazon
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I’m gonna give this a chance only because of no romance tag

Kato_Mack
Kato_MackLv1Kato_Mack

great read so far

YiSaan
YiSaanLv13YiSaan

5 stars, easy. Love the book!

Slevinn
SlevinnLv15Slevinn

I think this is a very coOl story idea, i love tower climbing books. But i will have to agree its hard to read on the slow parts, I often find myself skipping paragraphs when people arent talking. and idea for the spell what if the higher circle spells are the advance element, for example fire is 1-3 circles and the lava is 4-6 and then idk something else for 7-10.

DragonSlayer0032
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i was thinking the same...

AADucxter_42069:how dare you not put romance!!!!!!
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Daniel_Choritz
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very nice comment, but wtf, 4 stars for your own work? this gives high hope for your future :D

Best_User_Name1
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Either your a talented genius who happens to be an author or everyone else just sucks at writing.

TheDarkCheese
TheDarkCheeseLv10TheDarkCheese

who said no romance was a bad thing?

Narutoss5
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Sometimes one need to throw away romance. ..

TheDarkCheese:who said no romance was a bad thing?
dodewo3535
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i appreciate your realistic view of the novel and will be trying it soon

adzuba373
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Michavlt
MichavltLv10Michavlt

It’s an interesting story, it’s a shame the translation is really bad... If you could work on that, it would take your storytelling to the next level!

booksareepic
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I would have read it longer but I once I checked how far the chapters went for I saw the last free one is called the end of the first floor which kinda bugged me cause I am someone who doesn't try to spend much on things that start to get the cost high quick and I realised that I probably would go through to the end cause of wanting to know what happens so I stopped myself pretty soon