Review Detail of Yans_Tad in One Piece: Blood Unleashed [Revamped - in the synopsis]
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Sad, the first version was better no reason to tell his secret it's dumb as ****, i realy liked the story but that is a big nono for me, you can always trust people untill you cant anymore you never know how life experiences will change inora and kispset, and for someone who has been betrayed so many times and dying once and stilll not learnning you only deserve to die a second time imo. Sadly, i have to drop it now, too frustrating to read i dont see how revealing he is from another world makes any sense, or what the purpose is, showing that you trust them or making them think you are crazy? and with all the weird abilities that exist in one piece someone is bound to discover it from them trough torture or a devil fruit ability or mantra or something.i realy was gobsmacked by that. very sad.
One Piece: Blood Unleashed [Revamped - in the synopsis]
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The mc of your novel is Vlad the impaler, a sadistic psychopath of the highest level, I doubt that someone like that has the facility to trust someone. **: don't listen to me, I didn't even start reading your novel, I was only struck by your comment, considering that we are talking about a psychopath who liked to kill and torture.
Vostarian:I'll make it short again. That's your opinion, don't really stress much about it, because of a small detail that you instantly got a problem with. 1. Mantra is just Observation Haki called by the sky people in a different manner, maybe in your One Piece in your head it can read the thoughts of people, don't really mind. 2. The idea that Kipset and Inorra might have a change of heart, sure it's a possibility(anything can happen for all I care), yet again them telling around Vlad's origin, is like someone would start telling believable myths, some people might believe it while others might just scoof at it. Just look at the greek mythos or roman mythos. Nice stories that can make you actually believe that there existed those gods. Conclusion: Vlad told them a deeper story, but the narrator(me) just picked those moments in his life, because his life story was so great that even if I tried to bind some moments it would be hard. Do you think that Vlad reached his status because he never trusted or doubted some of his people? Do you think that leading an army of thousands of men to battle is for someone skeptical, a little shit who doubts everyone around him at every second? Obviously no. You need to place some trust in people, which here Vlad did fully on the two boys. He had no reason to lie to them after they in a sense saved his life from death, even if it was indirectly. Another thing for you, straight from me the author without bullshitting much around. That scene was mostly done for Vlad to go forward with his first identity. I'll ask you, would you write that scene differently if you tried to go back to Vlad's first identity? He explained his backstory to revert back to his first identity, because it felt like he was stealing the identity of "Zagreus" P.S: It's me that should say to you, "you saw that identity reveal in a wrong manner, not me the author." It's a bit hypocritical to tell me that, lol, when I know what's going with the story, but sure, I'll not go rant about it. Lastly, for you, the original story I wrote for that chapter was larger than you can expect. But can you read a 6000-7000 words chapter without getting bored? Maybe you can actually do it. So I just shorted it Vlad's narration to the important things that happened, not the betrayals or whatnot. You could say that is an unfortunate coincidence.
That's what you think. In sense he has so many secrets that you decided to whine about the one that does the less dmg to him. What about Hades or other big secrets, it seems you haven't even continue reading forward and stopped there at his revelead identity. But no problem. I'll give you a thought experiment that maybe who knows helps you out. So what would you do if you were to be reborned into a new world. Sure you have been betrayed by those around you many times, but this doesn't instantly goes around to chance your mentality that not everyone wants something from you. In this sense for me it would be simply stupid to write a betrayed butthurt for me. A person who is skeptical about everything will probably be first do die, compared to someone he starts to be surrounded with good people. So here's the last question. Would you be that butthurt person who would never trust a person again and achieve nothing in this new life? Remember you need to be surrounded by people to achieve something big. Respond, let me see your thoughs, would you be a butthurt in this story of yours?
Also what the crap was that with discovering his real identity when in fact he's just like them a person of this world? You with that high mentality you instantly decided that someone would even bother with Vlad from the start and actually think of even trying to find that exact thing about him. Suddenly they would target Kipset and Inorra who from the breakout have not a seemed connection with Vlad? Do you even hear yourself man, how stupid you sound? Ahem, it seems that from your version of the story you would actually make future enemies specifically go for two random people who Vlad told about his first life when he was young? Damn that some big plot armour for that villain. P.S. Matra is observation Haki, you can't do crap as finding people memories. Viola has the reading memories devil fruit, so you tell me startass, if Vlad did a bad move in not being a bound butthurt that would slowly forget about his first life.
ok first mantra can be so powerfull that in some cases it can read toughts. Second, it is obvious that he has to be surrounded by people to achieve something but i dont understand what revealing such an unbelievable secret achieves, ok you are from another world, what if they dont believe you and think you are crazy it's only in this shonen worlds where they accept you for what you are imediately, also i already said that life changes people so why do you expect that two kids who lived in slavery and suffering from there young age would never turn against someone who helped them, ungraterful people are everywhere they might in the future sell vlad information to make money, it's not like they stay in contact after the breakout. Let me give you an example, imagine that they are captured back after the escape when they are seperated and then they get interogated about vlad whereabouts , i believe that if there will isnt strong enough they would reveal to their torturer everything about vlad including his origin. Also, i dont see what revealing it acomplishes, like seriously what is the point, is he trying to make them trust him more, well they already rely on him and in a sense there trust in him is maxed out, so revealing his identity acomplishes nothing. And being surrounded with good people doesnt mean that you have to tell everyhthing about yourself, if he treats them right and cutivates there loyalty he can rely on them no need to be extravagant. so relying on the good nature of a human being to take such big secret to the grave by someone who has been betrayed by his own brother and subjects and multiple alies a multitude of times in his previous life is pretty ridiculous to me. But keep it up, i 'm suure some people dont mind the wholoesome aspect of the relashionship being perfect trust and kumbaya, but it is not my Jam, especialy if the mc has a legitimate excuse to become more paranoid than any other human in history. i cant believe you dont see the irony in that chapter, he spent the whole chapter telling a story about how trusting people made him lose everything and even got him killed, and at the end he reveals information that would make him the most wanted human in the history of this world.
I'll make it short again. That's your opinion, don't really stress much about it, because of a small detail that you instantly got a problem with. 1. Mantra is just Observation Haki called by the sky people in a different manner, maybe in your One Piece in your head it can read the thoughts of people, don't really mind. 2. The idea that Kipset and Inorra might have a change of heart, sure it's a possibility(anything can happen for all I care), yet again them telling around Vlad's origin, is like someone would start telling believable myths, some people might believe it while others might just scoof at it. Just look at the greek mythos or roman mythos. Nice stories that can make you actually believe that there existed those gods. Conclusion: Vlad told them a deeper story, but the narrator(me) just picked those moments in his life, because his life story was so great that even if I tried to bind some moments it would be hard. Do you think that Vlad reached his status because he never trusted or doubted some of his people? Do you think that leading an army of thousands of men to battle is for someone skeptical, a little shit who doubts everyone around him at every second? Obviously no. You need to place some trust in people, which here Vlad did fully on the two boys. He had no reason to lie to them after they in a sense saved his life from death, even if it was indirectly. Another thing for you, straight from me the author without bullshitting much around. That scene was mostly done for Vlad to go forward with his first identity. I'll ask you, would you write that scene differently if you tried to go back to Vlad's first identity? He explained his backstory to revert back to his first identity, because it felt like he was stealing the identity of "Zagreus" P.S: It's me that should say to you, "you saw that identity reveal in a wrong manner, not me the author." It's a bit hypocritical to tell me that, lol, when I know what's going with the story, but sure, I'll not go rant about it. Lastly, for you, the original story I wrote for that chapter was larger than you can expect. But can you read a 6000-7000 words chapter without getting bored? Maybe you can actually do it. So I just shorted it Vlad's narration to the important things that happened, not the betrayals or whatnot. You could say that is an unfortunate coincidence.
Yans_Tad:ok first mantra can be so powerfull that in some cases it can read toughts. Second, it is obvious that he has to be surrounded by people to achieve something but i dont understand what revealing such an unbelievable secret achieves, ok you are from another world, what if they dont believe you and think you are crazy it's only in this shonen worlds where they accept you for what you are imediately, also i already said that life changes people so why do you expect that two kids who lived in slavery and suffering from there young age would never turn against someone who helped them, ungraterful people are everywhere they might in the future sell vlad information to make money, it's not like they stay in contact after the breakout. Let me give you an example, imagine that they are captured back after the escape when they are seperated and then they get interogated about vlad whereabouts , i believe that if there will isnt strong enough they would reveal to their torturer everything about vlad including his origin. Also, i dont see what revealing it acomplishes, like seriously what is the point, is he trying to make them trust him more, well they already rely on him and in a sense there trust in him is maxed out, so revealing his identity acomplishes nothing. And being surrounded with good people doesnt mean that you have to tell everyhthing about yourself, if he treats them right and cutivates there loyalty he can rely on them no need to be extravagant. so relying on the good nature of a human being to take such big secret to the grave by someone who has been betrayed by his own brother and subjects and multiple alies a multitude of times in his previous life is pretty ridiculous to me. But keep it up, i 'm suure some people dont mind the wholoesome aspect of the relashionship being perfect trust and kumbaya, but it is not my Jam, especialy if the mc has a legitimate excuse to become more paranoid than any other human in history. i cant believe you dont see the irony in that chapter, he spent the whole chapter telling a story about how trusting people made him lose everything and even got him killed, and at the end he reveals information that would make him the most wanted human in the history of this world.
How did you come up with the idea that "mantra" which is just observation haki can read minds? Maybe you read a fanfic where you can and mixed it up
Yans_Tad:ok first mantra can be so powerfull that in some cases it can read toughts. Second, it is obvious that he has to be surrounded by people to achieve something but i dont understand what revealing such an unbelievable secret achieves, ok you are from another world, what if they dont believe you and think you are crazy it's only in this shonen worlds where they accept you for what you are imediately, also i already said that life changes people so why do you expect that two kids who lived in slavery and suffering from there young age would never turn against someone who helped them, ungraterful people are everywhere they might in the future sell vlad information to make money, it's not like they stay in contact after the breakout. Let me give you an example, imagine that they are captured back after the escape when they are seperated and then they get interogated about vlad whereabouts , i believe that if there will isnt strong enough they would reveal to their torturer everything about vlad including his origin. Also, i dont see what revealing it acomplishes, like seriously what is the point, is he trying to make them trust him more, well they already rely on him and in a sense there trust in him is maxed out, so revealing his identity acomplishes nothing. And being surrounded with good people doesnt mean that you have to tell everyhthing about yourself, if he treats them right and cutivates there loyalty he can rely on them no need to be extravagant. so relying on the good nature of a human being to take such big secret to the grave by someone who has been betrayed by his own brother and subjects and multiple alies a multitude of times in his previous life is pretty ridiculous to me. But keep it up, i 'm suure some people dont mind the wholoesome aspect of the relashionship being perfect trust and kumbaya, but it is not my Jam, especialy if the mc has a legitimate excuse to become more paranoid than any other human in history. i cant believe you dont see the irony in that chapter, he spent the whole chapter telling a story about how trusting people made him lose everything and even got him killed, and at the end he reveals information that would make him the most wanted human in the history of this world.
Leave him be, this is a type of readers I have to encounter, who read between lines like scanners and when something doesn't make sense, it's all of a sudden my fault.
Shiliew:How did you come up with the idea that "mantra" which is just observation haki can read minds? Maybe you read a fanfic where you can and mixed it up
Shiliew:How did you come up with the idea that "mantra" which is just observation haki can read minds? Maybe you read a fanfic where you can and mixed it up
Shiliew:I reread the cover story of Enel and there is literally nothing about mind-reading, not even mantra
Go read the story before talking about phycopaths in here. You'll see how wrong you are about this statement of yours. Also I think that you instantly think that just with the name Vlad the Impaler, I got a psychopath in my hands, but if you go read some history he wasn't at all so crazy you make him sound. Sure he killed people, rivals who at his smallest weakness would gladly eat him alive, but this doesn't instantly makes him a psychopath. The campaign against the Ottomans is a great showcase that he's not what people would think about him. Leading an army in a war, think about what it requires, and also fighting an 3x enemy army numbers. Read what the term means, read the story and after that give your thoughts. We as modern era people like to make presumptions about all short of characters in history. However we don't place ourselves in that times, where you could die from anything random, even a fever.
teerrryn:The mc of your novel is Vlad the impaler, a sadistic psychopath of the highest level, I doubt that someone like that has the facility to trust someone. **: don't listen to me, I didn't even start reading your novel, I was only struck by your comment, considering that we are talking about a psychopath who liked to kill and torture.
asaade_ragnarokm:i agree with you this is also the reason why i dropped this fic, there's actually no reason to tell his secret he only did it for the drama
