Review Detail of cvu1706 in God´s Eyes
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I think, this story is a decent read for a cultivation + pet + post apocalypse story, but that's it. I have read to chapter 38 and am stopping, because I am not interested in reading further. What I found good: + Unique MC. It's my first time reading a "fantasy" main character that was really blind for years in the story. And his main advantages are his eyes, which is a rare advantage/power. + No nationalism or racism seen that are so present in all recent chinese novels + Story started with info dump of the world background. Good in my eyes, because this way the reader has a clear understanding where the story is beginning to start. What I did not like: - There is nothing likeable, for me as the reader, about the world background(post apocalypse of high technical world). If you take for example famous works(anime, books, movies, etc.) like Harry Potter, Dragon Ball, Marcel, etc., you as the reader/watcher like those worlds to the point that you wish/imagine/fantasise to be part of those worlds. Because they have attractive features to them. I don't see any here in this story. It's just meh. Not bad, but also not good. - The novel contains chinese cultivation points that i dislike: -- The enlightening moment of the MC that strength is the goal and solution to everything(Chapter 24: First Blood) -- Insanely painful "martial" training(Chapter 29: Heaven's Hell): Decades ago, the core messages of "martial training" were just time-consuming, requiring effort and hard. Nowadays, the core message changed to time-consuming, effort and so painful, you gotta be a masochist. Quite frankly, seeing the MC doing this, does not evoke positive emotions for him from me. Just thinking, he has some screws loose in the head. Why make the novel setting like this? It's like you are saying, "strength" can only be gained by these sadistic/masochistic ways. A very unhealthy and disturbing underlying message. -- Melee fighter: Sorry, but I am reading light novels since 2000. Melee fights are so similar to each other, unless the melee fight has some uniqueness to them, they just bore me nowadays. For first time or recent readers, it probably is not a problem. - Transitioning of an intellectual MC into a muscle/strenght MC. - The side characters and the side character interaction with the MC is so unnatural. Example 1: The MC has no close connection with Greg, so why would Greg invite him to the soul awakening that would normally be kept secret? The relationship of the MC and Greg shown in the novel to this point, is not close enough to explain this behaviour. And there are further such inexplainable instances. It gives the feeling that Greg exists only to conveniently further the plot for the MC. Example 2: Greg's sister shows rude and hostile behaviour to the MC. So why does the MC not react to this? Even if you do not show unhappiness, you should still be unhappy or put off inside by this. Such unnatural behaviour(see Chapter 36). - Paragraph Info Dumps everytime the MC meets a new situation makes reading the story really tedious. I would rather get these information simultanously with the MC, when HE finds out these informations.
God´s Eyes
HideousGrain
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Thanks for your review and the effort you put into it. I can partially understand what you mean, but my writing experience was 0 when I began this novel and I´ve gained experience over time. Some of the - points you stated, will be fixed throughout the story, but it doesn´t matter to you anyway. I don´t know why you don´t like the pain tbh.. Isn´t it logical that you're in pain if you forcefully change something within your body? You even feel pain if you're receiving an injection. The Heaven´s Hell technique forcefully infiltrates your soul world core in your mind which is one of the most sensitive areas in a human body.. I hope you find a novel you like to read :D
This is just my honest opinion while reading your novel. For that being your first novel, it is quite a good novel. I hope some of my points, you can take as constructive criticism and better your novel or future novels. I think you have talent(disclaimer: I am just a reader, I know nothing about what it takes to be a writer). Some other points, like the pain one, are just my personal preferences themselves. Feel free to ignore those, if it does not fit you and your novel. With many people reading your novel, I doubt you will ever be able to create a novel that can get a like in everything from everyone. As for the pain: I think, I personally would have preferred the setting that soul cores themselves can naturally grow and his technique is just a way to better exercise and thus grow it. Doing so would then be just time-consuming, tiring, hard and taking effort. It fit's better what I imagine/hope martial arts to be. The core message behind this setting is: You take what you got, accept it and make the best out of what you got. Instead of now, where soul cores themselves cannot naturally grow and the technique forcefully, artificially changes the core. The core message behind this setting for me is: What you got, you don't like and don't accept and unnaturally change it to fit your idea.
HideousGrain:Thanks for your review and the effort you put into it. I can partially understand what you mean, but my writing experience was 0 when I began this novel and I´ve gained experience over time. Some of the - points you stated, will be fixed throughout the story, but it doesn´t matter to you anyway. I don´t know why you don´t like the pain tbh.. Isn´t it logical that you're in pain if you forcefully change something within your body? You even feel pain if you're receiving an injection. The Heaven´s Hell technique forcefully infiltrates your soul world core in your mind which is one of the most sensitive areas in a human body.. I hope you find a novel you like to read :D
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