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Don’t bother reading if you’re looking for a book with good quality writing and language style, cause this is not it. Could barely get past the first few chapters due to the random dropping of the “r slur” and fatphobic rhetoric and the author liking comments insinuating fatness is associated with unhealthily lifestyles. The dehumanizing language such as “elephant” and every single comment about the fl’s body was annoying to the point where I was rolling my eyes. Not really surprised though cause all novels on this app seem to run along the narrative of skinny pale white skinned women who are oh so beautiful and could never be fat!! Words of advice for the author, look into your internalized fatphobia and what message you’re intentionally or unintentionally pushing to your readers. Especially younger audiences where they can feel hurt by such comments about body types and how you associate fatness as a bad thing. Do better.
Married to his secret crush
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I appreciate the response and have read through it, however I don’t think you understand that even if you yourself were fat at one point in your life, it doesn’t excuse your fatphobia. Starting from chapter 4, you begin to make references to the FL’s body and how big and fat it is, which is okay, but it’s clear her body is being associated to fatness in a negative portrayal. Even if she has a health condition, that doesn’t excuse the rude language and comments about her body. Your readers can see this and feel hurt, and think about the message you’re pushing to your audience. Impact > intention. Connotating a fat body to an elephant, is rooted in fat phobia. Whether you’re being obtuse and choosing to ignore this or not, I suggest looking into your word choice. You also liked a comment saying “I see we have some unhealthy lifestyle enAblers here!” Why is it always fatness associated with unhealthy lifestyles? If as you said, the FL has a health condition making her fat then there doesn’t need to be unnecessary comments about her lifestyle being unhealthy, because if it’s a condition then she doesn’t have a choice or control over her weight. So you liking that comment, highlights your true intentions. I’m not saying all this to attack you or as a gotcha thing, but genuinely educate yourself. Furthermore, you used the r-slur (look it up if you’re unsure about the meaning and history), in chapter 4 of your novel. I suggest you educate yourself upon the meaning of the word and why the context you used it in is unnecessary, fictional book or not. And I understand the reality of the world and the stigma and fatphobia in society. But pushing it into fictional novels is bizarre to me because you as an author can write and chose to include so many better ideas, straying away from the problems of reality. Yet you didn’t. And that’s your choice I guess. Nevertheless, I hope you take my advice and edit the book again, even if you wrote it at 19. Start looking into what message your book is pushing, even if you didn’t mean to fatshane. Again, impact > intention.
Auroraaa:I won't do that, dear. I, myself, am not one of those tiny girls who fit these criteria so I won't do that. People claimed the FL's words to be fat-shaming and all those unhealthy stuff. But some readers saw my intention and mentioned that while it is not bad to be the way she is, she is trying to get comfortable in her own skin (catch—trying). Me liking their comments represented that 'Yes, that is what I am trying to show'. And I have been extra throughout my school days. Fat-shaming and all that apart, I did work hard to lose weight to be healthier because it was making a difference and I tried to show the struggles, and medical complications through the book, the consciousness that grows inside. Since I have been there, I would never make anyone feel that way. And the FL here has a health condition that makes her fat. In real life, there are many conditions where people can't lose weight and there are many instances where they are too skinny but can't gain weight. Both get comments. There are the slightly curvier ones who get remarks for their weight too. The world doesn't change, babe just because you nitpick absolutely harmless dialogue of fiction and bash it. The 'baby elephant' reference was supposed to be fun but relatable because she does resemble one. I dunno, it's cute. So I really dunno why anyone will have issues with it. She didn't say it in any angry way, she wasn't ashamed of herself and knew to take it lightly (that's what it was representing) Love yourself the way you are. But if it is causing you discomfort, you can make healthy changes too I dunno what r slurs are you talking about but if there were, it must have been an accident or one I didn't realize (do tell me so that I can edit it) Rest writing quality and all is all your opinion. I don't care if you read it or not lol but honestly, I was 19 when I wrote this book. I am learning and improving😄 Thanks for the review!
I won't do that, dear. I, myself, am not one of those tiny girls who fit these criteria so I won't do that. People claimed the FL's words to be fat-shaming and all those unhealthy stuff. But some readers saw my intention and mentioned that while it is not bad to be the way she is, she is trying to get comfortable in her own skin (catch—trying). Me liking their comments represented that 'Yes, that is what I am trying to show'. And I have been extra throughout my school days. Fat-shaming and all that apart, I did work hard to lose weight to be healthier because it was making a difference and I tried to show the struggles, and medical complications through the book, the consciousness that grows inside. Since I have been there, I would never make anyone feel that way. And the FL here has a health condition that makes her fat. In real life, there are many conditions where people can't lose weight and there are many instances where they are too skinny but can't gain weight. Both get comments. There are the slightly curvier ones who get remarks for their weight too. The world doesn't change, babe just because you nitpick absolutely harmless dialogue of fiction and bash it. The 'baby elephant' reference was supposed to be fun but relatable because she does resemble one. I dunno, it's cute. So I really dunno why anyone will have issues with it. She didn't say it in any angry way, she wasn't ashamed of herself and knew to take it lightly (that's what it was representing) Love yourself the way you are. But if it is causing you discomfort, you can make healthy changes too I dunno what r slurs are you talking about but if there were, it must have been an accident or one I didn't realize (do tell me so that I can edit it) Rest writing quality and all is all your opinion. I don't care if you read it or not lol but honestly, I was 19 when I wrote this book. I am learning and improving😄 Thanks for the review!
Truly appreciate your words and efforts. I have seen authors deleting negative reviews and comments and there is no way I am going to do that because my book is not perfect at all lol and you put the effort into typing the comment so that is that 💚 Trust me when I say I appreciate your efforts but the point is, I wanted to add reality to my book. We can say glorified stuff all we want but being fat comes with phases. I wanted to write this book in such a way that if a fat person does read it, they will feel like they were not the only ones who have had self-deprecating moments, where they thought they could have been better and I wanted them to feel empowered just the way Fl did when she grew comfortable in her skin when she adapted the healthy lifestyles and relished in the post-workout glow instead of being focused on flesh. It's a process, babe. Embracing yourself the way you are, skin color, body size, personality, nature, height, all of it is a gradual process that might never start on a pool of positivity but somewhere along the way, it teaches us how we are beautiful the way we are. I wanted this arc to be relatable, not perfect. Like, a depressed person doesn't get cured overnight. He struggles in many, he mocks himself, and he goes through phases. Being fat, unfortunately...works that way for some people. In this book, I tried to highlight them even when I could have made a highly perfect Fl who didn't give a d m n about her weight. It would have been cool to readers but as an author, I didn't find it real. It would have been sugarcoated, no? Fake and shallow too. So, I gave what I felt was genuine. She went through phases. 1) shocked at the body's obesity 2) making jokes that might or might not be serious/self-deprecating movements 3) uncomfortable in her skin 4) learning about her health condition (in later chapters) 5) Growing to accept it and being more comfortable with her skin 6) adapting to a healthy lifestyle without hoping for weight loss or anything. She just wanted to make sure she was staying healthy. And throughout chapters, we see how she and people around her like her for who she is, not her size or anything (though she loses weight because later) If you read till the end of the book, you would have known that *spoiler* after she had her baby, because of her health condition, she gained weight and all we see is her body-positive vibes, acceptance of her and she treats herself like a queen. Please let us not pretend that fat people don't go through phases. It is never a glittery path to accept these things. And it takes time and patience, persistence. I showed it over the course of 500 chapters so I totally get it that you can't see it in 20-40 chaps or anything. I was an emotional eater in the past, and I still am. I eat when I am sad, angry etc etc, and is that unhealthy? It is. Does that stop me? It doesn't. But after I adapted to my current lifestyle, I made up for the junk I take in by hitting the gym twice even though I am told to not work that hard, I am exaggerating it and all that(That's called enabling here alright?) But I am in a happy space now tho. When someone is more than willing to be healthier, nobody has the right to stop them just like some readers (I dun blame em. They were probably kids) did. At the end of the day, it's not sunshine and rainbows. It starts bumpy but along the way, we gradually accept the tides and learn to surf 🏄 (I hope the example was good lol) Regarding unhealthy lifestyle enabling, I liked that comment in all my senses because it happened around the time when people did not know about the FL's health condition and her body weight was attributed to her unhealthy junk eating habits and all that. So, when the new girl tried to work out and lose weight and failed and called herself fat, people went righteous and mad at her for being derogatory about fat people. People who got my point understood that she was trying to adopt a healthy lifestyle (her comment might have been right or wrong but all she wanted was to be a healthy version of what she was). I did not like that comment to show support or incite something. I did it because it was right. At that point in the book, it was wrong for people to blame the girl for feeling helpless about trying to lose weight and being frustrated when she failed. This is my book, perfect or imperfect, Idc. I told you I was young, not because I made some mistakes but because I was not a better writer since a minority of people misunderstood what I wanted to portray. I still am not the best writer out there. I am learning every day (for as long as I write, I will keep learning). There is no way I would edit my story just to get appreciated or just to avoid negative reviews. At the end of the day, I have a clear conscience that I did not do anything that goes against my morals so that is that. If I edit my book for a few people who misinterpreted my efforts just based on a few phrases, It will be like cutting off the limbs of my baby just because they are not perfect. It might sound harsh but to a writer, it is that. As for what does need to be edited, it is the slur you mentioned. I will definitely look into it and edit it. I'd also appreciate it if you can help me by mentioning what exactly was that so that it's easy for me to find it. Love you for your honesty and constructive criticism. I hope I was able to make my point clear. I am still learning and in the future, I will make my writing more expressive and my views more distinct!😊
paintedaisys:I appreciate the response and have read through it, however I don’t think you understand that even if you yourself were fat at one point in your life, it doesn’t excuse your fatphobia. Starting from chapter 4, you begin to make references to the FL’s body and how big and fat it is, which is okay, but it’s clear her body is being associated to fatness in a negative portrayal. Even if she has a health condition, that doesn’t excuse the rude language and comments about her body. Your readers can see this and feel hurt, and think about the message you’re pushing to your audience. Impact > intention. Connotating a fat body to an elephant, is rooted in fat phobia. Whether you’re being obtuse and choosing to ignore this or not, I suggest looking into your word choice. You also liked a comment saying “I see we have some unhealthy lifestyle enAblers here!” Why is it always fatness associated with unhealthy lifestyles? If as you said, the FL has a health condition making her fat then there doesn’t need to be unnecessary comments about her lifestyle being unhealthy, because if it’s a condition then she doesn’t have a choice or control over her weight. So you liking that comment, highlights your true intentions. I’m not saying all this to attack you or as a gotcha thing, but genuinely educate yourself. Furthermore, you used the r-slur (look it up if you’re unsure about the meaning and history), in chapter 4 of your novel. I suggest you educate yourself upon the meaning of the word and why the context you used it in is unnecessary, fictional book or not. And I understand the reality of the world and the stigma and fatphobia in society. But pushing it into fictional novels is bizarre to me because you as an author can write and chose to include so many better ideas, straying away from the problems of reality. Yet you didn’t. And that’s your choice I guess. Nevertheless, I hope you take my advice and edit the book again, even if you wrote it at 19. Start looking into what message your book is pushing, even if you didn’t mean to fatshane. Again, impact > intention.
🔥 Author, here is your 👑 I was stalking your account for new mood boards but who knew I'd find this!! I have PCOS and my body is not the way it used to be. While I don't know the plots you're talking about but I can't agree more with the self-deprecating moments. It's a fact! Phases, fact! All of the above are facts! And I skipped this book of yours because transmigration is not my thing. All 5✨ reviews could not comment me to read it but I am going to read it because of this review and your reply to it. You pitched it well! And I feel like I was missing out on a gem~ I am so happy that you are in a happy place now. Keep doing well♥From what I know, emotional eating can be a
Auroraaa:Truly appreciate your words and efforts. I have seen authors deleting negative reviews and comments and there is no way I am going to do that because my book is not perfect at all lol and you put the effort into typing the comment so that is that 💚 Trust me when I say I appreciate your efforts but the point is, I wanted to add reality to my book. We can say glorified stuff all we want but being fat comes with phases. I wanted to write this book in such a way that if a fat person does read it, they will feel like they were not the only ones who have had self-deprecating moments, where they thought they could have been better and I wanted them to feel empowered just the way Fl did when she grew comfortable in her skin when she adapted the healthy lifestyles and relished in the post-workout glow instead of being focused on flesh. It's a process, babe. Embracing yourself the way you are, skin color, body size, personality, nature, height, all of it is a gradual process that might never start on a pool of positivity but somewhere along the way, it teaches us how we are beautiful the way we are. I wanted this arc to be relatable, not perfect. Like, a depressed person doesn't get cured overnight. He struggles in many, he mocks himself, and he goes through phases. Being fat, unfortunately...works that way for some people. In this book, I tried to highlight them even when I could have made a highly perfect Fl who didn't give a d m n about her weight. It would have been cool to readers but as an author, I didn't find it real. It would have been sugarcoated, no? Fake and shallow too. So, I gave what I felt was genuine. She went through phases. 1) shocked at the body's obesity 2) making jokes that might or might not be serious/self-deprecating movements 3) uncomfortable in her skin 4) learning about her health condition (in later chapters) 5) Growing to accept it and being more comfortable with her skin 6) adapting to a healthy lifestyle without hoping for weight loss or anything. She just wanted to make sure she was staying healthy. And throughout chapters, we see how she and people around her like her for who she is, not her size or anything (though she loses weight because later) If you read till the end of the book, you would have known that *spoiler* after she had her baby, because of her health condition, she gained weight and all we see is her body-positive vibes, acceptance of her and she treats herself like a queen. Please let us not pretend that fat people don't go through phases. It is never a glittery path to accept these things. And it takes time and patience, persistence. I showed it over the course of 500 chapters so I totally get it that you can't see it in 20-40 chaps or anything. I was an emotional eater in the past, and I still am. I eat when I am sad, angry etc etc, and is that unhealthy? It is. Does that stop me? It doesn't. But after I adapted to my current lifestyle, I made up for the junk I take in by hitting the gym twice even though I am told to not work that hard, I am exaggerating it and all that(That's called enabling here alright?) But I am in a happy space now tho. When someone is more than willing to be healthier, nobody has the right to stop them just like some readers (I dun blame em. They were probably kids) did. At the end of the day, it's not sunshine and rainbows. It starts bumpy but along the way, we gradually accept the tides and learn to surf 🏄 (I hope the example was good lol) Regarding unhealthy lifestyle enabling, I liked that comment in all my senses because it happened around the time when people did not know about the FL's health condition and her body weight was attributed to her unhealthy junk eating habits and all that. So, when the new girl tried to work out and lose weight and failed and called herself fat, people went righteous and mad at her for being derogatory about fat people. People who got my point understood that she was trying to adopt a healthy lifestyle (her comment might have been right or wrong but all she wanted was to be a healthy version of what she was). I did not like that comment to show support or incite something. I did it because it was right. At that point in the book, it was wrong for people to blame the girl for feeling helpless about trying to lose weight and being frustrated when she failed. This is my book, perfect or imperfect, Idc. I told you I was young, not because I made some mistakes but because I was not a better writer since a minority of people misunderstood what I wanted to portray. I still am not the best writer out there. I am learning every day (for as long as I write, I will keep learning). There is no way I would edit my story just to get appreciated or just to avoid negative reviews. At the end of the day, I have a clear conscience that I did not do anything that goes against my morals so that is that. If I edit my book for a few people who misinterpreted my efforts just based on a few phrases, It will be like cutting off the limbs of my baby just because they are not perfect. It might sound harsh but to a writer, it is that. As for what does need to be edited, it is the slur you mentioned. I will definitely look into it and edit it. I'd also appreciate it if you can help me by mentioning what exactly was that so that it's easy for me to find it. Love you for your honesty and constructive criticism. I hope I was able to make my point clear. I am still learning and in the future, I will make my writing more expressive and my views more distinct!😊
You too. Take care. I won't spoil you but there is a major spoiler for the book hidden in your comment hehe
Mariposa_22:🔥 Author, here is your 👑 I was stalking your account for new mood boards but who knew I'd find this!! I have PCOS and my body is not the way it used to be. While I don't know the plots you're talking about but I can't agree more with the self-deprecating moments. It's a fact! Phases, fact! All of the above are facts! And I skipped this book of yours because transmigration is not my thing. All 5✨ reviews could not comment me to read it but I am going to read it because of this review and your reply to it. You pitched it well! And I feel like I was missing out on a gem~ I am so happy that you are in a happy place now. Keep doing well♥From what I know, emotional eating can be aimage