I love that you utilized foreshadowing in your work! And nicely done^^ Although, one thing, I really would like to understand the conversations happening so for that, I suggest if you're really apt to using your language, have vivid but concise description at the end. Some part were also lengthy so try to break those into two. Nonetheless, it is a great start! Considering this is your first stepping stone. Keep up and fighting!!
humeyra
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