Review Detail of Imagination in Code A: You're my Mission

The story is a little interesting, to say the least. The author puts quite an attention to the "show, don't tell" formula and it seems to have worked since it had aroused my attention. However, the story does have some grammatical errors here and there but it doesn't detract much attention (I suggest, however, to return to earlier chapters and edit it so that new potential readers are not dissuaded from the earlier chaps). If I have something to critique, it is that the plot seems a little rushed and sometimes slow. It's quite strange really. It takes a chapter or two to reach the school but a single chapter for gunfire to arrive. But if the author is intending to write 100 chapters or so, then the rhythm is okay. Anyways, the story has potential and perhaps, it will claim a spot in the rankings one day.