Review Detail of Lord_Eggie in I JUST WANT A PEACEFUL LIFE

Grammer isn't just bad. It's literally a war crime. I would suggest the author that they try to write everything in same tense. There's a lot of tools that fix these mistakes too. As it is rn, it's like a really bad mtl or maybe worse. Word, Google docs, even gmail mail composition, there's lot of free options for improvement. If you can't even put at least this little effort then you don't even deserve a review about character, world, story development.