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leonel551
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honestly bad! the mc is OP has a creation ability and thats enough as he can create anything from training manual abilities magic resources etc. there is a lot of the MC monologuing about how the strong eat the weak, how not being productive to society should be punishable by death, how he is helping humans evolve because some reason(these are heavily explain in like 10 chapters no dialogues just the mc monologuing). them the mc creates a naruto virtual reality game and spends another 10 chapters doing absolutely nothing because is a game! is for training so the story is useless so i don't know why go into suck details! after that i drop as the mc got bored of naruto and left for another world. all these happen in noblesse like 500 years before cannon!

Roaming around the Multiverse

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Lazy_Coffin
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i know I'm just bored. I'm writing this just for fun.

Lazy_Coffin
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I'm writing a fan fic because I'm bored and just to pass time until school starts. Thanks to the review though. I never really read my own fan fic as I know it's bad. Tell me if you have any recommendations or what I need to improved to make my writing better or even readable.