Review Detail of phoenixhyperion in The Awakening

Hello author! First of all, I want to praise you for the superb characters' portrayal, detailed body language, and emotional descriptions. It was nicely crafted, I applaud you for that. But I may have a slight issue with regards to your story pacing, just a bit. I think it's too fast, leaving some gaps in the story here and there. It's not a bad thing, I assure you, it's just that I got lost between parts. Like, in the initial chapter she said she's alone and then someone came in? Then these two people appeared, I think you provide an explanation on what's their relationship but it hasn't sunk into me yet since it's not highlighted too well. Like some important parts that answered the question "why are they in that situation?" is not elaborated well. She was treated badly at first, and it sounds like she hates him, and then in the next chapter, she actually likes him? Yeah, you got me lost on that part. But other than that, you're story was superbly great. You describe your characters so well, I can picture them out vividly. And it's an awesome thing. You did a great job with this story author! It's mind-blowingly cool! Keep up the good work!