This is a great story and all but you should give up the hypnosis bit that is pure non sense. how does that even make sense, it is kind of ridiculous.
GNaNA
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LIKEi get it but having knowledge of the futur is enough as a cheat being able to hypnotize people on top of it kind of makes it too easy for the MC witch would make the story less interesting. we all like the journey not the destination. So if the mc bitchslaps everybody on his way to the throne with militaty might and hypnosed infiltrated people making the process too easy where he doesnt even have to rely on scheming it kind of underminds his achivements if there is no antagonists worth the chalenge what is the point of the protagonist. the champion of the world vs an ******* isn't an interesting fight to watch there has to be opponents that are worth the trouble top make the mc shine just like the tywin arc. Setbacks are good it shows there are worthy opponents. anyways, great job and keep it up.
GNaNA:The hypnosis only worked on the weak-minded so it was impossible to work on Rhaegar or the Kingsguards on the first place.
Yans_Tad:i get it but having knowledge of the futur is enough as a cheat being able to hypnotize people on top of it kind of makes it too easy for the MC witch would make the story less interesting. we all like the journey not the destination. So if the mc bitchslaps everybody on his way to the throne with militaty might and hypnosed infiltrated people making the process too easy where he doesnt even have to rely on scheming it kind of underminds his achivements if there is no antagonists worth the chalenge what is the point of the protagonist. the champion of the world vs an ******* isn't an interesting fight to watch there has to be opponents that are worth the trouble top make the mc shine just like the tywin arc. Setbacks are good it shows there are worthy opponents. anyways, great job and keep it up.