The story has potential, but there are a few things that should be noted by the author. Firstly, punctuation. You barely use any punctuation in dialogues! It makes the story less attractive and interesting though it can be fixed. Secondly, the synopsis. Don't you think it's too short? Just maybe add a few more things to make it a bit clearer. Feel free to disagree!
Joecurie
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LIKEOkay in the first chapter, I noticed that the usage of the brackets is unnecessary in some cases when you can just make another paragraph saying it. I think it would make it look more perfect. It's just my opinion. Feel free to disagree.
Joecurie:And starting from what chapter, did you notice no punctuations? I will be waiting for your response.
Joecurie:No,I appreciate your time reviewing my book❤️❤️ Okay,any where else?