Review Detail of Wafflezz in Kingmaker's Revenge
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The reincarnation trope does nothing to the novel. In fact, you can do away with reincarnation and the story will make more sense because FL does not act mature and does not act as if she had lived a previous life. She silently takes disgusting abuse with no benefit only to fire the abusive maid at the end of the day after all the abuse. It brings to question then why she would take that abuse when there is no one else watching/listening and she has no plans ofher than to fire the maid at the end of the day. Seems to me that she is not smart enough even after reincarnation. She certainTly acts like a 12 year old even though she is supposedly mentally older because of said reincarnation. She passively takes everything and gets touched when she receives some kind of menial affection that she so craved from her father in her previous life eventhough she claims she will use him and not let him do whatever etc.... Grammar is fine, story not so.
Kingmaker's Revenge
saemi
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hi ! i honestly would like to thank you for the criticism of my novel. i certainly do have flaws in my writing, especially in terms of my plot. i will make sure to take your criticism, thank you for taking the time to read my novel !! i hope to go back and edit my earlier chapters to make the plot better! this is only inspiration to do so! thank you once more!
Well i dont think the plot will change much considering you already wrote 100s of chapters. Besides, changing the plot will only make it difficult for you. I think rather than that, my criticism would hopefully challenge you to write another novel, a better one which will be the improved version of your first novel with lesser plot holes. I think the first novel would more or less act like the guinea pig. Considering this seems to be your first work, it is quite a job well done because it made me so angry at her passiveness. This story managed to evoke some feelings from me🤣
saemi:hi ! i honestly would like to thank you for the criticism of my novel. i certainly do have flaws in my writing, especially in terms of my plot. i will make sure to take your criticism, thank you for taking the time to read my novel !! i hope to go back and edit my earlier chapters to make the plot better! this is only inspiration to do so! thank you once more!