Review Detail of NakedApron in Rise of King Arthur

Tried to clean up the first few chaps a bit, but there were way too many so I gave up, But it wasn't like the sentences were incomprehensible, so it's all good. Just need a little polishing. I've read about 7 chaps, skipping the r18 scene, but it felt like you bring out the system UI a bit too much. Maybe just highlight the changes that happened, or just put it in the comments, if you want to keep the readers updated. Haven't gotten to chara development and wOrld building yet, but I'll give you the benefit of the doubt and trust you on it. If I read further, maybe i'll leave another review ~