Review Detail of OhhhhNooo in Mob In Khr

It could use a lot of work but, not bad for what im assuming to be a first story. My honest opinion is that i find the MC’s existence quite sad. It’s also irritating when people write their own character to be lazy. To actually get a good story out of it is harder then you’d think. In truth the story will most likely follow the original plot but, im bored so might as well read.