I remember reading this story 3 to 4 weeks ago and being very disappointed with the dialogue and the grammar errors. To be honest, during that time I would have given your story 2 stars, however, you have improved your novel putting quotation marks, and improving the grammar. Of course, there are still a few grammatical errors that can be seen, however, I still do understand the essence of what you meant! I do encourage you to make the chapters a bit longer. I do see a lot of improvement in your work, congrats!
Williane_M_P
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