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Demiurge_Ohara
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I'll be blunt. the English, Dialogue, Background sucks. but at least the author is willing to listen from the perspective of others from what I've gathered. I'm leaving a list on How to make a SI for newbies .(Honestly I feel envious because I couldn't write anymore with how busy I am, I do hope that newbies don't rush things like I did when I was a kiddo.) here's a Tip. There are many self inserts out there but there are not many, what I consider, well written ones. Most self inserts have a tendency to delve into wish fulfillment, harems, and fix-it sues. Those types of self inserts are... inferior ... solely for the reason it is simply unrealistic. Think about it. Let’s say you were reincarnated/transmigrated to a foreign universe with untamed powers that you have no idea to control. What is the first thing you would do? Have fun exploring and try out your new magical powers? Plan on meeting and befriending the canon characters? Save someone that you know is going to die if you won’t do anything? All wrong. The first thing and only thing I will do is survive. A self insert that focuses on doing anything to survive is a well written self insert.I don’t to read self inserts that focuses on trying to fix everything in their limited means. Leave that to the canon characters. I want a self insert that does anything it takes to survive because that makes the story more realistic and rational. Human beings are selfish enough to prioritize their survival over others. On the other hand Saints are the ones with Anime’s about them. With that being said in order to survive you need power. But this is not a universe like the one you watched in an anime. This is a real rational universe that has its own laws and rules. I dont expect a self insert born into the naruto universe to instantly be a master in chakra like hes some sort of genius in par with itachi. Lets face it. You were average in real life. You are still average reborn into another universe. But knowledge is another type of power which you have plenty of. You are a god of knowledge. Omniscient knowledge of the past, present, and future. With that knowledge the self insert can work harder and earlier than others dabbleing in munchkinry in order to achieve power rationally. But be warned. The minute you stepped into this universe you know so much of, canon is out the window. The butterfly effect is in motion and every action you take obscures everything you know of the future. A good self insert also keeps power levels in check. In a realistic and rational Self insert, the SI starts out weak and progressively gets strong. There should always be someone or something stronger than the self insert. A stronger power to threaten the self insert. A stronger power that the self insert can strive for. If that is not true the self insert is basically a god and their godhood was either obtained through many chapters of trials and tribulations or the story you are reading is wish fulfillment trash that has no respect to the universe they are writing about. It is hard to find well written self inserts, especially male self inserts.

Sans, the Skele-Human

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_CoffeeCat_
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Yep, that's why I read reviews with good criticism to know the whats good and whats bad in a story. I'm trying to write a story in the future but I know its gonna be shitty xD. P.S. Can I copy your quote because I want to send it to a friend?

QuestionableReadin:Any criticism that an author gets from a veiwer, you should use to build a story. Criticism isnt only meant for the Author themselves, but anyone trying to create something similar
Demiurge_Ohara
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** : it's a copy paste and im to lazy to edit it but you get the point

QuestionableReadin
QuestionableReadinAuthorQuestionableReadin

Thanks for the criticism! And honestly, Im writitng this Fan-fic for my own enjoyment. I’ll try and make my own Dark Isekai and use your criticism as my base

Demiurge_Ohara
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...Well that's refreshing, I usually get a frustrated berating which I usually ignore from egotistical authors and I quote "This is my Story so if you don't like it, then **** you someone does", or something like that. A refreshing change. And so long you listen to the others perspective and their constructive criticism, then you're off the hook and will get a proper review other than 5 star spammers . ( sometimes they give the the aura of 'A.I' or Bots... Brrr...)

QuestionableReadin:Thanks for the criticism! And honestly, Im writitng this Fan-fic for my own enjoyment. I’ll try and make my own Dark Isekai and use your criticism as my base
QuestionableReadin
QuestionableReadinAuthorQuestionableReadin

Criticism is a nice bowl of medicine. Its hard to shallow, but it helps you in end

Demiurge_Ohara:...Well that's refreshing, I usually get a frustrated berating which I usually ignore from egotistical authors and I quote "This is my Story so if you don't like it, then **** you someone does", or something like that. A refreshing change. And so long you listen to the others perspective and their constructive criticism, then you're off the hook and will get a proper review other than 5 star spammers . ( sometimes they give the the aura of 'A.I' or Bots... Brrr...)
Demiurge_Ohara
Demiurge_OharaLv5Demiurge_Ohara

QuestionableReadin:Criticism is a nice bowl of medicine. Its hard to shallow, but it helps you in end
Kokushibou
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Well, i don't see the problem with wish-fulfillment story's. Some just like that the mc is pretty strong already or even OP, often time's people want to read about slice-of-life or just face-slapping rather than seeing the mc face hardship's, and stuff like losing someone. I personally can read almost anything that's not complete garbage.

Inferno_Vor
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Ye was about to say. An OP MC can be well done, but it's hard to do very well usually. And honestly as long as it's somewhat interesting people are gonna read.

Kokushibou:Well, i don't see the problem with wish-fulfillment story's. Some just like that the mc is pretty strong already or even OP, often time's people want to read about slice-of-life or just face-slapping rather than seeing the mc face hardship's, and stuff like losing someone. I personally can read almost anything that's not complete garbage.
_CoffeeCat_
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My good Sir, can I copy your tips as a guide if I ever write a Self Insert fanfic/novel?

QuestionableReadin
QuestionableReadinAuthorQuestionableReadin

Any criticism that an author gets from a veiwer, you should use to build a story. Criticism isnt only meant for the Author themselves, but anyone trying to create something similar

_CoffeeCat_:My good Sir, can I copy your tips as a guide if I ever write a Self Insert fanfic/novel?
QuestionableReadin
QuestionableReadinAuthorQuestionableReadin

Absolutely! I dont really care mich about things that people use from me :P As long as you dont copy my books

_CoffeeCat_:Yep, that's why I read reviews with good criticism to know the whats good and whats bad in a story. I'm trying to write a story in the future but I know its gonna be shitty xD. P.S. Can I copy your quote because I want to send it to a friend?