Review Detail of NeiEternal in An Ego's journey

Grammar is fine.... Story development is interesting.. mainly first time i saw this AE fanfic... well not bad at all the mc should put more emotion tbh.. a bland reaction is bad but oh well overeating is much worse.. well.. this will be interesting.. hope it wont go downhill or dropped... might as well take your beloved 'ES' if you do that:D...