Review Detail of Below_the_current in Novel moved to a different account

I love your work, it's well thought out, the characters are relatable and the way you wrote Gen is really good. Writing quality is great, it's just needs that extra polish to find the small things that are hard to spot. However, I do have to say that maybe you can try to experiment with the sentence length. After chapter 5, I think, there are a lot of big heavy paragraphs and some that had more than one topic meshed together. Every new though/idea/concept needs its own paragraph - I learned that the hard way, lol. I would love to comment on every chapter, but I'm kind of swamped with my own works and woah am I Drowning in it. lol Story development is great, something is always happening. Character design is on point. World background is slowly introduced. I recommend finding some sources on youtube on how to add world building into your story - Brandon Sanderson has two lectures on it that changes the game altogether. Dialogue was good for the most part, it just felt a bit off sometimes. The voices of the characters are not distinct. I recommend Jerry Jenkins, he had a blog with a lot of free resources and a youtube channel. It's so great! Omg I love him. lol Good job, honestly. I can't wait to see how you're going to portray their romance arc. Will it be Hate-to-friend-to-lovers, or hate to lovers? Wish you luck with everything! P.s your work is really good, one of the few that I didn't have to force myself to read to review it.