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I really love reading yandere books, but I can't give it a perfect score, my bad. review was based on the early chapters. I like the story but the transition is uhmmm--- well?, for a former slave MC is quite carefree like nothing happened at all. In my perspective characters isn't stablished steadily ,build a foundation first (all heroines so far have yandere tendency without a unique trait or attitude , for me they all like the same girl with different appearance-- their love can be mistaken as responsibility(or it really is!)it would be better if they can find more reason to be with him-- develop them steadily). Unrealistic events or lack of details (give us more details before moving to the next scene/setting-- for me your pace is somehow fast). well I haven't read all present chaps so I can only give this minimal observation. Although there are shortcomings, overall it's still pretty good story, it just need a little more push and editing/polishing. I rarely write a review 'cuz I'm not really good critique nor writer, I just found potential from this novel, so pls don't be offended and take this chance to improve.

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