Review Detail of SolAce in Lucifer's Prodigy

An intriguing plot about the boy, who was born from a demon. The beginning was nice, yet I wished it was given more context about Lucifer’s and the woman’s love. However, it has the potential to have a large fan base. I just have a few issues: 1. Try not to place parentheses in the paragraph; it not only distracts the reader but cuts the flowing of the paragraph. I would suggest making some parentheses into the character’s thought or just write it as their actions. Like when the boy woke up from being surrounded by gargoyles, instead of saying he had a flashback, I would say “All I remember is leaving school and then...” The ugly faces of those boys rushed through his mind, and Ash gritted his teeth. “Those bastards attacked me etc etc.” 2. The sentences can be improved to flow better. Removing parentheses are one way to improve it; another is to show more than tell. Show he is embarrassed by making Ash blush or scratch his head awkwardly or show he is agitated by making him grit his teeth or bare them. 3. Grammar is one of the most occurring problems for many writers. Pointed some out to you, but I would suggest going through grammarly or other grammar apps to help. 4. Another perk about show and tell is the reader can visualize what the character is doing as well as exuding. Makes it more immersive as well as giving life to your characters. All in all though, you are doing well, author ! Keep up the good work !