Review Detail of daoist_buttlover in The Porter is Secretly an SS-Level Hunter
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its alright, i guess. i read up to chapter 10 before i stopped. interactions between father and son are very unnatural and feels super robotic, and it feels like the bisexual stuff is done more for the sake of it than for actual character development. MC is inconsistent in some places, acting and behaving out of character for a "lone wolf" type. also, it felt like a poor writing choice to have the very first job be irregular. inconsistencies with registering to become a porter like how the guy who signed him asked for no ID at all. i guess if you want a novel with a gay mc, this is a choice. otherwise? just read SS rank suicide hunter or stay at home dad in another world, both of which fill their niche better than this one thats straddling both.
The Porter is Secretly an SS-Level Hunter
RJMidnight
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RJMidnight:Thanks for the review. This is my first time writing a story like this with dungeons and stuff. I have a few things I want to point out. I already mentioned in the story why the company does not ask for porters ID. As stated, F-levels are not cared for and only needed to carey things for hunters so the government thinks it is pointless to ask for their IDs. How was it wrong for the man’s job as a porter when that was the point of the story? I need more explanation from your review. Can you give more on the interactions between son and father that sounds robotic so I can wee what to improve (although I believe my story started to get better at 20 and up)? Also the MC is bi not gay, there is a difference. His sexual orientation is not used for character development, it is there cause I wanted to do some romance and I am only do LGBT romance from experience. And the MC is not really a lone wolf type, he likes to be alone because people have betrayed him before (stated later on in the story). The beginning is rough because I spontaneously started this story out of boredom and wanted to do something cliché, something I never done before. So, yes it is bad in the beginning, I was even going to drop the story. But it started to get better later on, I would say try again and keep reading but I won’t push you. Thank you for trying out my story! ☺️
Thanks for the review. This is my first time writing a story like this with dungeons and stuff. I have a few things I want to point out. I already mentioned in the story why the company does not ask for porters ID. As stated, F-levels are not cared for and only needed to carey things for hunters so the government thinks it is pointless to ask for their IDs. How was it wrong for the man’s job as a porter when that was the point of the story? I need more explanation from your review. Can you give more on the interactions between son and father that sounds robotic so I can wee what to improve (although I believe my story started to get better at 20 and up)? Also the MC is bi not gay, there is a difference. His sexual orientation is not used for character development, it is there cause I wanted to do some romance and I am only do LGBT romance from experience. And the MC is not really a lone wolf type, he likes to be alone because people have betrayed him before (stated later on in the story). The beginning is rough because I spontaneously started this story out of boredom and wanted to do something cliché, something I never done before. So, yes it is bad in the beginning, I was even going to drop the story. But it started to get better later on, I would say try again and keep reading but I won’t push you. Thank you for trying out my story! ☺️
RJMidnight:Thanks for the review. This is my first time writing a story like this with dungeons and stuff. I have a few things I want to point out. I already mentioned in the story why the company does not ask for porters ID. As stated, F-levels are not cared for and only needed to carey things for hunters so the government thinks it is pointless to ask for their IDs. How was it wrong for the man’s job as a porter when that was the point of the story? I need more explanation from your review. Can you give more on the interactions between son and father that sounds robotic so I can wee what to improve (although I believe my story started to get better at 20 and up)? Also the MC is bi not gay, there is a difference. His sexual orientation is not used for character development, it is there cause I wanted to do some romance and I am only do LGBT romance from experience. And the MC is not really a lone wolf type, he likes to be alone because people have betrayed him before (stated later on in the story). The beginning is rough because I spontaneously started this story out of boredom and wanted to do something cliché, something I never done before. So, yes it is bad in the beginning, I was even going to drop the story. But it started to get better later on, I would say try again and keep reading but I won’t push you. Thank you for trying out my story! ☺️
RJMidnight:Thanks for the review. This is my first time writing a story like this with dungeons and stuff. I have a few things I want to point out. I already mentioned in the story why the company does not ask for porters ID. As stated, F-levels are not cared for and only needed to carey things for hunters so the government thinks it is pointless to ask for their IDs. How was it wrong for the man’s job as a porter when that was the point of the story? I need more explanation from your review. Can you give more on the interactions between son and father that sounds robotic so I can wee what to improve (although I believe my story started to get better at 20 and up)? Also the MC is bi not gay, there is a difference. His sexual orientation is not used for character development, it is there cause I wanted to do some romance and I am only do LGBT romance from experience. And the MC is not really a lone wolf type, he likes to be alone because people have betrayed him before (stated later on in the story). The beginning is rough because I spontaneously started this story out of boredom and wanted to do something cliché, something I never done before. So, yes it is bad in the beginning, I was even going to drop the story. But it started to get better later on, I would say try again and keep reading but I won’t push you. Thank you for trying out my story! ☺️
the problem with the son and father interaction is that it fills no purpose and is lacking in emotions
RJMidnight:Thanks for the review. This is my first time writing a story like this with dungeons and stuff. I have a few things I want to point out. I already mentioned in the story why the company does not ask for porters ID. As stated, F-levels are not cared for and only needed to carey things for hunters so the government thinks it is pointless to ask for their IDs. How was it wrong for the man’s job as a porter when that was the point of the story? I need more explanation from your review. Can you give more on the interactions between son and father that sounds robotic so I can wee what to improve (although I believe my story started to get better at 20 and up)? Also the MC is bi not gay, there is a difference. His sexual orientation is not used for character development, it is there cause I wanted to do some romance and I am only do LGBT romance from experience. And the MC is not really a lone wolf type, he likes to be alone because people have betrayed him before (stated later on in the story). The beginning is rough because I spontaneously started this story out of boredom and wanted to do something cliché, something I never done before. So, yes it is bad in the beginning, I was even going to drop the story. But it started to get better later on, I would say try again and keep reading but I won’t push you. Thank you for trying out my story! ☺️