Yoo. Don't get scared by the score, give it a try, you won't waste much of time by giving a chance. Who knows, maybe you will fall in love with this. Bad world building. (You started with him getting powers and just sent him to do things, even with that prologue you just gave a cliche explanation of the world... what's bad with how much mc already did). Bad story progression ( It's rushed... well I think you get it. It's simply rushed,). (Edit: Personally, I don't like the things that happened) Unlikeable writing (I didn't have any problems with the grammar but I think the way its written is pretty annoying and puts one away from the book.) My Opinion: You(author) shouldn't drop this, unless you dislike writing or something... Don't be unmotivated, if you have get enough writing experience everything will just fall in the right places. Also, I'm going to use this as my review. (Extracted From: Chapter 21,(Out Of 39) Comment Section). Stars: (Spoiler in the last paragraph) 2 3(Based in the "1 chapter per week" Written over there, what looks just about average for me) 2 2(Nothing of special, just a cliche/standard personality... (SPOILER here,------------------------------------------------------------------------- author gave the mc a skill to make him cold hearted... and he looks like a good boy for me, which I don't like, and is strange with the 2 'personalities' together.) 2
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