Review Detail of OutsideYourDoor in I Know the Secret to Surpass Level 100

I want to give this novel a good review, but I can't really do that. I refuse to pad my review to make someone feel better. Author, your premise is decent. I can clearly see from the dialogue that you have a plot planned and there's a deep story being written. The problem that I'm having is that there isn't enough. At some point between conceptualization and actualization your story falls short. We can clearly tell that there's a story behind all the numbers that you want to invent, but the story isn't coming through well enough. While reading this novel, I felt like I was in a cellphone with spotty service. Sometimes it would be there, and other times it would be missing. You're not transitioning your thought processes enough to allow the story to flow properly. It's all jerky and uncoordinated. I feel like for every two or three plot devices, there's only half or less than half of the amount of world building that's required being put in. Sometimes your characters introduce things with zero Segway into them. No build up, no explanation. It's a random thing throw into the middle of a scene that is supposedly used to transition into another scene, the problem is that there's no transition. It feels shoddy.