Review Detail of DaoistNightDweller in The Great Demon System
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Hhmmmm..... I don't really know... I don't really do reviews because I just lurk but seeing that we have a lot in common, I decided to make one. As a fellow teenager that writes for fun, I shall bestow upon you my thoughts on your work. My overall honest opinion: I think it's recycled garbage that wants to pass off as an art but still looks and smells like recycled garbage. I know that this is fantasy and all, but you could at least make the characters more realistic. You just basically make the characters for forced plot, 1 dimensional tools that just exist for the MC. I kinda see what you're going with. That anime trope with a fresh cold and calculative genius cruel MC that swoons heavenly genius beauties, but it ended up as trash that can't differentiate between a friendly normal guy and a sadistic fûck that would torture anyone who offended him or his "Family". Anyway, I have a lot of complaints on your character Design but it's useless so nah. Your writing quality is goodish, not good but definitely not bad either. Therefore I will call it bland instead. As a reader, I want to warn you that you should stop depending on your torture sessions too much, you don't always have to describe what the MC does, we all know what happens anyway. Some readers don't really like those. (Except me, I'm into that shìt.) Story Development: What story development? Updating Stability: 5 stars!(I envy you cause you have so much free time when we are basically the same age.) World Background: Honestly it's just a copy paste of that vampire novel. You just added a bit of what you prefer. Get some originality dipshìt. (I don't really like that vampire novel, it's just shounen but darker. At least the guy can express his imagination tho.) Anyways... I was just bored and wanted to rub some salt on an author who wasted my time reading his recycled garbage. I have nothing against you, as a teenager like you, I just wanted to mess with you cause you suck and I have no life. Anyways, hope you improve your writing and stop stealing shît. Hopefully you can get your originality by the time I finish reading your other novel which is eerily similar to the garbage you recycled. I will come back and give you some pointers again if I feel like it. Oh, and since I am also a teenager that has no idea how to write, don't take my review seriously. You can even delete it if you like. Ciao!
The Great Demon System
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Make enough money... Ahem! Theoretically speaking, by unit of measurement using a cheeseburger that costs 1$, how many cheeseburgers can you buy per month or week. And 2nd, how are you able to earn said cheeseburgers. Just asking for a friend. And this friend has a part-time job modeling. Ahem! Just asking for a friend.
Drip:Honestly, I make enough to make it my career but my parents want me to still pursuit university even though I feel like my time could be better spent writing 😔🙏. And, thanks for giving the second novel a chance, I hope you like it! ❤
That was all in the start, the advice you gave about not relying on torture I have more than learned a long time ago. If you want to sew how I evolved as a writer without going to the most recent chapters, I recommend you to read my second novel. It's honestly much better since I use my lessons learned from this one into that one. Also, I really don't have much free time, I just work a lot and completely dropped many of my hobbies all together just to write. I don't even watch anime or read anymore. 😔
Mad respect dude. Dropping anime just to write. I usually just read whatever's for free so I waste my time. Hmm, as a fellow 16yo, may I ask if you are taking writing as your career? I have career choosing problems. Also I didn't really finish the novel cause I got bored in the 50ish chaps, I am currently reading your second one so I can drop some more salt. No need to thank me.
Drip:That was all in the start, the advice you gave about not relying on torture I have more than learned a long time ago. If you want to sew how I evolved as a writer without going to the most recent chapters, I recommend you to read my second novel. It's honestly much better since I use my lessons learned from this one into that one. Also, I really don't have much free time, I just work a lot and completely dropped many of my hobbies all together just to write. I don't even watch anime or read anymore. 😔
Honestly, I make enough to make it my career but my parents want me to still pursuit university even though I feel like my time could be better spent writing 😔🙏. And, thanks for giving the second novel a chance, I hope you like it! ❤
DaoistNightDweller:Mad respect dude. Dropping anime just to write. I usually just read whatever's for free so I waste my time. Hmm, as a fellow 16yo, may I ask if you are taking writing as your career? I have career choosing problems. Also I didn't really finish the novel cause I got bored in the 50ish chaps, I am currently reading your second one so I can drop some more salt. No need to thank me.image
Sadly, I'm not too comfortable exposing income but it's more than four thousand cheeseburgers for sure a month.
DaoistNightDweller:Make enough money... Ahem! Theoretically speaking, by unit of measurement using a cheeseburger that costs 1$, how many cheeseburgers can you buy per month or week. And 2nd, how are you able to earn said cheeseburgers. Just asking for a friend. And this friend has a part-time job modeling. Ahem! Just asking for a friend.image
Sorry, my bad. Ididn't think the question through. Anyways, since writing seems to be a very lucrative business, I will try and write a story myself. Hopefully mine will at least turn out to be readable. I am loving your second story btw!
Drip:Sadly, I'm not too comfortable exposing income but it's more than four thousand cheeseburgers for sure a month.