Review Detail of AlishbaM in [Inside]

The synopsis is extremely good, not too long and not too short. The first chapter, however is very confusing. I got the part that she was dreaming, but the dream felt all too sudden, like there was not much of a background and description to it. As if you were writing it in a hurry, which doesn't really make the reader want to continue. I also think that her relation with her mother is quite extreme, not the way a kid would talk to their mother. You should work on that and the description part. The plot is very good, a little editing could make this an amazing story!!