Review Detail of OrdealOfMc in MCU: The Ultimate Spider
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A great piece of work. The grammar is immaculate, with no errors that I could see. Character development, even of side characters, is great, as author gives them backstory and fleshed them out for a bit before introducing them to action. World backround: There's plenty of snippets that give you the impression of the state of the world. Dialogue of characters feels natural, and without hitching, without akward formats or the dreaded "User: example" that many people hate. The power progression is believable, not too fast or too slow. The main character is easy to like, and hard to get frustrated at. His motivations are good, namely to protect previous people and his own freedom. His morals are flexible enough to not be a goody two shoes that many fans don't like about the OG spide-man. His use of existing recourses actually shows that extra intelligence that Peter was known for. And the writing style itself is easy to read and enjoy. Al in all, a great fic, definely recommend to read. 10/10.
MCU: The Ultimate Spider
Average_Butler
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Np, friend. Definely love the story, so it's no struggle to take five minutes to write some words, that would hopefully ensure that the fic doesn't get dropped *wink wink*. Seriously though, just read the 8th, or was it 9th chapter, and saw one comment saying they don't want to see the OG suit, or something along those line. Personally, I agree. Why? The MC was an assassin in his previous life, and is one in his current one. He understands the necessity of secrecy, and secret identity, so it would be, frankly speaking, stupid to traipse around in red-blue, or any other noticeable colour, Spandex. In my humble opinion, MC is smart enough to recognise the fact, *hint hint*, and would choose something less conspicuous. Such as matte black suit, with some additional super-armour plates that MC (conveniently) invents as extra security. A helmet inĂtead of a mask, so no accidents of getting it of and exposing the Identity. A HUD like from Iron Man to help with rapid information processing. He got an A.I for that after all. And last but no least, make the material adaptive to the frequency of photons, (or whatever makes the colour look like it does) so that the Spider Armour can become invisible, making spider even better at stealth. It would be great in combat too. After all, how can you black a punch, when the only indication of one incoming, is a slight shimmer in the air.
Average_Butler:Seriously, thanks for the in-depth review. Don't see many of these on Webnovel, so I'm honored to have one on my story!
Love the whole story so far keep up the great work but I am just waiting for that next chapter or your doom slayer mcu
Average_Butler:Seriously, thanks for the in-depth review. Don't see many of these on Webnovel, so I'm honored to have one on my story!
Average_Butler:Seriously, thanks for the in-depth review. Don't see many of these on Webnovel, so I'm honored to have one on my story!
Average_Butler:Seriously, thanks for the in-depth review. Don't see many of these on Webnovel, so I'm honored to have one on my story!