Review Detail of Evil_For_the_WIN in Nameless Monster

Review at chapter 14 It's good and I recommend it. Now for the writing quality. It's improving. But the repetitive use of A instead of The is what annoy me. You say "A guy is..." And talking about the same guy you still say "A guy ...". This was done a thousand times. Most of the chapters start like bad jokes. Eg: A tall guy and a short guy are in room with a coffin; A tall guy, a short man and a woman are in a carriage with a coffin; A man, a woman and a kid are drinking tea;... Now the characters are still a little shallow but I give you the benefit of the doubt. At my understanding, you made the supernatural world involved with human politics. At least the mage are involved. Now I hope you understand that their implication will change the war outcome. It's not a battle of numbers and technologies anymore. The side with the strongest mage win. They won't be deterred by a simple missile which may not be as powerful as their strongest spell. The normal humans and weak mages will just be canon fodder. I hope you will take that in account. Also you made the mage (together) stronger than they should have been but don't forget that they are the weakest spectrum of the supernatural world. You will have to boost the others too or just make it an AU. My best regards.