Review Detail of White_Falcon21 in Rising Against Fate

Ugh, finally I have a free time after almost a month working without resting properly. You know, do not ever wished to work for animation or publisher industry Well, where is my manner? Let's get started! Writing Quality (SSG) I don't find something strange or wrong in the story, really. Except the word "fished" in the late 3 chapters. I don't know it means "finished" or literally "fished" (since I think it doesn't has a connection to the related sentence?), but you might try to check it out, or maybe I'm the one who wrong this time. The story is paced in slow and steady flow, somehow I really like it. Just don't forget to separate actual conversation and text. This is just minor issue that you can found on beginning late until middle chapters. Example: Z said "I would like to..." and his face turns sad until make... To: Z's face turns sad, "I would like to..." (New text) His expression makes A pitying him, etc. Stability of Updates (TA) Every author has his/her own problems that delay / prevent them from uploading new chapters, so I don't have any rights to criticize about your "uploading time". Story Development (SSG) The story development is related with your writing quality and story pace itself. It's all started with MC fired from his job, "reincarnated" into a baby after entered the capsule, adopted by good parents, named "Razak" then abandoned, adopted by a drunkard, abused then abandoned again before ended up adopted by a rich man...Mr.Grace who wants to become a Tribe Leader. Then, he enrolled to a Magic School and met support character, as well as potential heroine(?). The latest chapter described about he that wants to make a club, before "opposed" (confronted) by student council, which led us to first minor climax. Like I wrote above, your story pace is good and nothing wrong with it. But remember, in school, there is an organization that more powerful than student council, for example "Class Representative Assembly" (and etc) who has a duty to "oversee" the student council's work. And then, making a student council is like an "overpower", "sacred" (prestigious), "elite" and "scary" (intimidating) organization whom "respected" and "admired" by normal students is kind of "cliche" idea. You, at least "should" try to make your own "school organization" that far different from normal cliche student council, so the reader could get "new PoV". If you could make 108 tribes, why you couldn't make just one school organization? I think the use of "OP student council" idea should be reduced for your future novels (or other writer's novel), so the readers wouldn't be "trapped" in wrong idea of student council. But since this is a "FANTASY" type novel, my suggestion above falls into "suggestion" type. Just remember, unique fantasy novel might bring the readers into new "world" that has never been appeared in their life. Character Design (SSR) Main elements to describe a character are: Physical Appearance, Character (Grumpy, Sorrowful, etc), Alignment (Optional), Background Life. Do it and you will skip whole paragraphs describing about them. World Background: I'm a type of person...and "we" are type of people who like difficult, complex and hard to understand "world building". For example, if yo create 108 tribes, "we" love to see their "uniqueness" through magic, spell development, history, culture, original magic, etc. Another thing is about war and the end of war, since the tribes involved with it is too many, it's kind of hard to describe their roles and "stories" of them. My suggestion...you need to be careful about it or it would ended up "weird" or "far too confusing". The MM device has been making us wondering about special magic used by each clan. But since this is just the beginning of novel, I won't overstep my boundary. That's all from me! I hope you can keep writing uploading new chapters every day! Although, you should worry about your health first. Don't become me who can keep writing for 2-3 days by just sleeping 4 hours on each of the day. Sincerely, Dead/Lost Novel and Manga Writer! (My novel is also on Webnovel too!) XD OOFFF to gooo!!!