Review Detail of yuiiixx in Cultivation Epic: Divine Godly Punisher, Armed With Imposing Systems
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Is this novel gonna be a harem? Author, you should put a harem tag on the novel if so. Kinda hate how the MC says he’s going to be loyal to Elena and then flips back and tries to kiss that Karen chick. Using some bs justification like “oh you shouldnt mind if I kiss you”. Yuck... Harems always baffle me. Many MCs have them but I fail to comprehend how the women manage to keep peace, especially in a cultivation world where killing is natural. It’s unrealistic in a sense how these peerless beauties with genius talents manage to put down their pride and share their man with other women. If any of you guys have watched Chinese historical dramas about the Imperial palace, holy shit, all those women are scheming and jealous as hell. The women are kind of flat in this story and have nothing going for them other than their beauty. Just disappoints me how all women fall at the MC’s feet when they could possibly find someone who would actually cherish and love only them. Women in cultivation novels should have more self respect and value themselves more, and not settle for less. Women are always treated as conquests and tools for men to vent their sexual frustrations. This novel also embodies the view of women just being sexual objects to men. This is why many young girls love the contemporary romance novels with faithful MLs. This novel doesn’t cater to both genders.
Cultivation Epic: Divine Godly Punisher, Armed With Imposing Systems
koladeizdavid
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Ok, so it is a harem novel, thank you for clarifying. I still stick to what I said in my review, but I am happy that you did reply. What I said about devaluing women is just about the whole premise of harems in the first place. A woman cannot have more than one partner, but a man can. Where's the equality in that. The MC shares the same sentiments, as seen with Olivia, when someone asked if he would be angry if someone took her away, and he said he would be. Your MC's views on relationships in general is just too shallow, and end up making him seem like a hypocrite. He told Elena he would not make her sad, and that he didn't purposefully try to attract Karen, and yet, he tries to kiss her. Elena knows that he will probably have a harem, and doesn't want to be apart of that, which is why she tries to distance herself away from him. The MC disregards this fact when recounting this to his friend Jack because he deems it below his concern. How is that respecting her wishes? He flippantly shows his "liking" and "favour" to any beautiful woman. What kind of shallow emotion is that. What I said about the female characters being shallow is that besides their beauty, what makes them different from all the other women? I think they all want power btw, since this is a cultivation novel setting. But surely, with a harem, you can't possibly develop every single female character appropriately and give them context and depth to them. You literally reduce them to different types of beauty - their character is their appearance lol. And what I mean by this novel doesn't cater to different genders is that typically, women don't want to share their man with anyone else. Sure, this is a novel, but honestly, seeing all of these women fall at the MC's feet is kind of demoralising. Maybe these women don't pursue love, and merely power, and that's fine. I just find the use of "love" so offputting. Like seriously...the MC "loves" Elena; but what about her does he love? A single relationship itself is hardwork, having numerous and calling all of them love is preposterous. The MC uses the word "like" so flippantly. What about them does he like, exactly? Michelle made him have an erection as soon as he saw her, and then she just left like that: what kind of actual feelings can he develop for her in that short period of time apart from lust and a favourable impression due to her beauty? Jennifer is an annoying old hag who demands respect without trying to earn it first, and had tried to kill the MC. MC, being the mega simp he is, ofc forgives her. Under the umbrella of her "protection" that has done him far more bad than good - inviting so much trouble in the process. His reason for liking Jennifer is what? That she protects him [even though she has invited more trouble and put him in these situations without him wanting it in the first place] and that she's beautiful? What about Olivia....uhhh just that she's beautiful lol. Kate....uhh he has known her for a while, perhaps & she's beautiful. Deborah....uhhh he has known her since young, she's provocative and she's beautiful. The MC has such less time on his hands and yet here he is beginning to let himself indulge in carnal desire. The fate of his brethren, and the lives of many are at stake and here he is chasing p*ssy. He's a big hypocrite, and it makes his character distasteful. He's talented and handsome...and even with a tragic backstory he doesn't seem that loveable. He's born with the universes golden spoon and has everything delivered to him on a silver platter; he doesn't have to work that hard to be greater than everyone else. How can he truly be a deep character without experiencing any hardship. Compared to the ruthless MCs who have crawled from the bottom up, he really doesn't deserve all of the power given to him.
koladeizdavid:Hi. Thanks for reading. Actually it's an harem novel. I removed the harem and r-18 tag in it because we were told to do so. By the management of WN just for 3 days for some reason. Then we can put it back again. Now, all that u said is about my novel devaluing women and degrading their importance in the society to just being *** tools. My MC doesn't see them in that way. I am surprised where u go that in the book and why you arrived at that? You said the women seem flat and have nothing to offer. I really don't understand this part. Are they his wives? Of course they aren't. They are powerful experts who focus on cultivation to grow stronger. Seems u have forgotten so I would bring it back to ur memory. Remember Jennifer declined all suitors to grow to become powerful? Then the Alex and Karen part was because Alex wanted to find out something about Karen. That's why he made that statement. So please and please, my book doesn't try to devalue women because it's all I can see in ur review. And the part that it doesn't cater to both genders is wrong. The story caters to both. They are both trying to become powerful to become great experts. Remember the purifier, she was a mighty expert that nearly destroyed a quarter of the population of the alien race. So women aren't *** tools in my novel as you portray them to be. They are people trying to become powerful too and get their own territories. I don't why you arrived at that because my MC has only one girlfriend who he loves at the moment. Right that he likes Jennifer from the academy and Michelle who he saw in the valley which may make it seem like he's lusting after because of their beauty. He truly likes them. Well, thanks for the review And thanks that u read. Sometimes we need criticism to set ourselves into the right direction. So, in some few days, the harem and r-18 tag would be back. Bless your heart folk. 👍 ✌️
Hi. Thanks for reading. Actually it's an harem novel. I removed the harem and r-18 tag in it because we were told to do so. By the management of WN just for 3 days for some reason. Then we can put it back again. Now, all that u said is about my novel devaluing women and degrading their importance in the society to just being *** tools. My MC doesn't see them in that way. I am surprised where u go that in the book and why you arrived at that? You said the women seem flat and have nothing to offer. I really don't understand this part. Are they his wives? Of course they aren't. They are powerful experts who focus on cultivation to grow stronger. Seems u have forgotten so I would bring it back to ur memory. Remember Jennifer declined all suitors to grow to become powerful? Then the Alex and Karen part was because Alex wanted to find out something about Karen. That's why he made that statement. So please and please, my book doesn't try to devalue women because it's all I can see in ur review. And the part that it doesn't cater to both genders is wrong. The story caters to both. They are both trying to become powerful to become great experts. Remember the purifier, she was a mighty expert that nearly destroyed a quarter of the population of the alien race. So women aren't *** tools in my novel as you portray them to be. They are people trying to become powerful too and get their own territories. I don't why you arrived at that because my MC has only one girlfriend who he loves at the moment. Right that he likes Jennifer from the academy and Michelle who he saw in the valley which may make it seem like he's lusting after because of their beauty. He truly likes them. Well, thanks for the review And thanks that u read. Sometimes we need criticism to set ourselves into the right direction. So, in some few days, the harem and r-18 tag would be back. Bless your heart folk. 👍 ✌️
Hmm. Well, thanks for the review and the reply. 👍 As a new writer who started three months ago, I didn't really plan for this novel to be a harem one. It was just action and some other stuffs. But I was advised to make it harem as it's what sells on WN. So I tried to made it so and did pretty bad at it from what I can see in your review. And from novel selections so far which I have observed, harem novels no longer move most audiences just because of this flaw that you mentioned. After I am done with this, I will write a new one that wouldn't give the vibe and feel of harem in any way. Although my book is very flawed in that aspect, I will still try to defend it. Lol. It's my child. No matter how bad it did, I will protect it. My MC has been an admirer of beauties right from young. And he is still very naive. Doesn't know the way of the world as he didn't struggle much for things and even got them served in excess on a platter of gold just like u mentioned. But he is developing. He may seem like an idiot, hypocrite and whore now. Lol. But in the chps after 120 or so, all this would change. U mentioned that he was giving them favour. Kate and Deborah grew with him, so he has this developed this romantic feelings for them since childhood. So he saw it as nothing bad in giving them those methodologies. For Olivia, he wasn't angry. He said he would be sad if she entered into a relationship. Because of her beauty and mostly for her being a genius. For Michelle, well, he liked for her beauty. It was kinda deep liking at first sight. We as humans do experience this right? We see this stranger and baam, we already like the person without even knowing person's true characters. I myself have experienced this before. For Jennifer, she didn't try to kill him. She only punished him. And he gave her those treasures so she would be able to protect him as he's weak against such powerful experts. It wasn't her that caused the problems in the first place. It was Alex by revealing his abilities to Micah when he got overjoyed. For Karen, he never mentioned that he liked her. From what he told Jake, he said he would only lust after her body. Right? He only tried kissing her when she said she liked him. U know, her following him to that place got him suspicious and angry. So he tried to mess with her. And finally for Elena, I think u have mixed things up. She didn't say anything like I don't want to be part of ur harem, she knew this and accepted it like that since it was the way of their cultivation world. Alex didn't disregard anything she said about that when recounting things to his friend. U could check it out to confirm what I said. Anyways, what I just know is that every novel can't be perfect. There would always be this flaw or the other. So I guess the relationship part is the major flaw in this one which I would try to improve on. I guess you must have dropped it by now but thanks (x3000) for pointing all these out to me. Do have a great time out there. 👍 ✌️
Actually, Elena said "I can't share my boy with other females". I'd take that as her saying she'd rather not be apart of a harem. I guess like you said, she gave in, and accepted her fate. Jake really be corrupting the MC's mind with the harem fantasy. When the MC recounted the scenario to Jake [about why Elena said she only wanted to be friends], he did leave out the fact that she "can't share my boy with other females" [I re-read chapter 102]. There's nothing wrong with the MC being OP. I just hope he'd be less female-crazed and more cultivation focused to really live up to the responsibility he's meant to fulfil. Webnovel really be lying about harem being popular. As I said before, just looking at trial reads and even originals being made about contemporary romance with female leads, monogamy, loyalty and fluff are #1. Cultivation has always been a popular genre. I'm just warning you to develop your harem well since you're making one. Harem novels tend to get sh*t ratings on novelupdates (you can check) and don't do that well in the current social climate. For original novels, people tend to prioritise grammar, and ofc, an interesting story. Luck is also a key factor in getting your novel out there. Since you suggested to keep reading to see the MC's development, I'll continue until I get sick of the harem. Keep fighting! For your first work, this novel is very well thought out.
koladeizdavid:Hmm. Well, thanks for the review and the reply. 👍 As a new writer who started three months ago, I didn't really plan for this novel to be a harem one. It was just action and some other stuffs. But I was advised to make it harem as it's what sells on WN. So I tried to made it so and did pretty bad at it from what I can see in your review. And from novel selections so far which I have observed, harem novels no longer move most audiences just because of this flaw that you mentioned. After I am done with this, I will write a new one that wouldn't give the vibe and feel of harem in any way. Although my book is very flawed in that aspect, I will still try to defend it. Lol. It's my child. No matter how bad it did, I will protect it. My MC has been an admirer of beauties right from young. And he is still very naive. Doesn't know the way of the world as he didn't struggle much for things and even got them served in excess on a platter of gold just like u mentioned. But he is developing. He may seem like an idiot, hypocrite and whore now. Lol. But in the chps after 120 or so, all this would change. U mentioned that he was giving them favour. Kate and Deborah grew with him, so he has this developed this romantic feelings for them since childhood. So he saw it as nothing bad in giving them those methodologies. For Olivia, he wasn't angry. He said he would be sad if she entered into a relationship. Because of her beauty and mostly for her being a genius. For Michelle, well, he liked for her beauty. It was kinda deep liking at first sight. We as humans do experience this right? We see this stranger and baam, we already like the person without even knowing person's true characters. I myself have experienced this before. For Jennifer, she didn't try to kill him. She only punished him. And he gave her those treasures so she would be able to protect him as he's weak against such powerful experts. It wasn't her that caused the problems in the first place. It was Alex by revealing his abilities to Micah when he got overjoyed. For Karen, he never mentioned that he liked her. From what he told Jake, he said he would only lust after her body. Right? He only tried kissing her when she said she liked him. U know, her following him to that place got him suspicious and angry. So he tried to mess with her. And finally for Elena, I think u have mixed things up. She didn't say anything like I don't want to be part of ur harem, she knew this and accepted it like that since it was the way of their cultivation world. Alex didn't disregard anything she said about that when recounting things to his friend. U could check it out to confirm what I said. Anyways, what I just know is that every novel can't be perfect. There would always be this flaw or the other. So I guess the relationship part is the major flaw in this one which I would try to improve on. I guess you must have dropped it by now but thanks (x3000) for pointing all these out to me. Do have a great time out there. 👍 ✌️
To be honest, you could make your harem genred novel more unique. Maybe have internal conflict lol [watch Yanxi Palace on youtube if you want some ideas]. Instead of women who throw themselves at the MC’s feet because of his talent and his appearance, maybe try to create female characters who the MC fails to capture. So that he’s less arrogant and cocky. Aside from that, I’d love to see some more brotherhood going on, female FRIENDSHIPS (sworn sisters) and more cultivation! If it wasnt your intention to truly make this novel a harem, then I don’t really see why you need to centre the MC’s personality about his thirstiness. Females who were originally potential love interests, falling for people other than the MC, is a really interesting concept
koladeizdavid:Hmm. Well, thanks for the review and the reply. 👍 As a new writer who started three months ago, I didn't really plan for this novel to be a harem one. It was just action and some other stuffs. But I was advised to make it harem as it's what sells on WN. So I tried to made it so and did pretty bad at it from what I can see in your review. And from novel selections so far which I have observed, harem novels no longer move most audiences just because of this flaw that you mentioned. After I am done with this, I will write a new one that wouldn't give the vibe and feel of harem in any way. Although my book is very flawed in that aspect, I will still try to defend it. Lol. It's my child. No matter how bad it did, I will protect it. My MC has been an admirer of beauties right from young. And he is still very naive. Doesn't know the way of the world as he didn't struggle much for things and even got them served in excess on a platter of gold just like u mentioned. But he is developing. He may seem like an idiot, hypocrite and whore now. Lol. But in the chps after 120 or so, all this would change. U mentioned that he was giving them favour. Kate and Deborah grew with him, so he has this developed this romantic feelings for them since childhood. So he saw it as nothing bad in giving them those methodologies. For Olivia, he wasn't angry. He said he would be sad if she entered into a relationship. Because of her beauty and mostly for her being a genius. For Michelle, well, he liked for her beauty. It was kinda deep liking at first sight. We as humans do experience this right? We see this stranger and baam, we already like the person without even knowing person's true characters. I myself have experienced this before. For Jennifer, she didn't try to kill him. She only punished him. And he gave her those treasures so she would be able to protect him as he's weak against such powerful experts. It wasn't her that caused the problems in the first place. It was Alex by revealing his abilities to Micah when he got overjoyed. For Karen, he never mentioned that he liked her. From what he told Jake, he said he would only lust after her body. Right? He only tried kissing her when she said she liked him. U know, her following him to that place got him suspicious and angry. So he tried to mess with her. And finally for Elena, I think u have mixed things up. She didn't say anything like I don't want to be part of ur harem, she knew this and accepted it like that since it was the way of their cultivation world. Alex didn't disregard anything she said about that when recounting things to his friend. U could check it out to confirm what I said. Anyways, what I just know is that every novel can't be perfect. There would always be this flaw or the other. So I guess the relationship part is the major flaw in this one which I would try to improve on. I guess you must have dropped it by now but thanks (x3000) for pointing all these out to me. Do have a great time out there. 👍 ✌️