Honestly, I can't finish the third chapter. The story keeps switching from first person POV to third person POV, I didn't mind it at first because it was in separate paragraphs, but then it started happen anywhere and I was quickly becoming frustrated with reading it. Another point that I was becoming annoyed with was, after someone spoke it ended with "said rudely (name)", it would be better if the order was "(name) said rudely" and then a thesaurus could be used to find words to use besides just said.
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