Review Detail of DWArden45 in A technomancer’s journey in an apocalyptic world
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Writing quality is alright but needs an editor to make scenes transition better. Most of the time you don't realize a time skip has happened or where everyone is. Story development is okay. Nothing to write home about but it's tiresome to keep seeing every man with powers turn into a *** maniac. Character design is utter shit. The mc is a child prodigy yet does the most reckless things despite having an army behind him. Dude has been in too many life threatening situations that are due to his utter recklessness/stupidity. Updating stability is ok. World background is good. All in all I would read this if a decent editor reigned in the bad and spaced out the story. As it is now, it is bad.
A technomancer’s journey in an apocalyptic world
SagelyDaoist
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Thank you for your review, as for the MC I have tried to base on someone I know, he is brilliant in academics to the point genius as well as a good sports person but has the habit of making bad decisions in his life, not to mention he is reckless, as such my MC despite achieving so much will be flawed, and the reason that he is being attacked so much has a good reason behind it as well. As for people with power turning bad, well there bad and good, and unfortunately you have yet to encounter the good people in this story.
Yeah but that is for yiur friend in modern day, here we are in Apocalypse world i don't think even the most reckless person can't know when to stop when he is a genious so here it's more like you just want to go iwth MC recklessness then add something to why he is like that. Better just say i want him like that for now and plan to arrange it later at least it will be more believable.
SagelyDaoist:Thank you for your review, as for the MC I have tried to base on someone I know, he is brilliant in academics to the point genius as well as a good sports person but has the habit of making bad decisions in his life, not to mention he is reckless, as such my MC despite achieving so much will be flawed, and the reason that he is being attacked so much has a good reason behind it as well. As for people with power turning bad, well there bad and good, and unfortunately you have yet to encounter the good people in this story.