Review Detail of Octanus in I Reincarnated as a Shinai

The author needs to take some English writing courses. The formatting of the text is pretty awful, but this is nothing unusual with webnovels that lack professional editors. The disjointed and poor use of grammar is too hard for me to ignore and really drags me out of the moment every time. And I'm not just talking about a typo every now and then. Things like mixed use of tense or odd structure. The writer's narration and the thoughts and words of his characters are all identical, leading to the characters feeling as though they are just puppets without personality. The author frequently uses elipses (needlessly) during narration. Then a character will talk and end their sentence with an elipses rather than normal punctuation, which gives the naration and the character the same boring, monotonous feeling. Very bad. The poor use of line breaks is frustrating. When a character speaks, if there is more to the narration or description, do not add a period before the end quotation, use a comma. Your sentence isn't over just because the character stopped speaking if you follow it immediately with something. Example: "I don't know what I want to do," Bob said. Rather than: "I don't know what I want to do." Bob said. See how annoying that is to read? No need to start a new line. Write proper paragraphs. Your paragraph should contain more than two to three sentences. The world is the same stuff you find in every one of these types of stories. There are guilds, nobility based upon magic ability, academies, that sort of thing. Very dull if you've read a novel in the setting before. The one redeeming quality for this 'novel' is the idea of the main character being a mostly inanimate object, placing the main character into a more secondary role in the story. It's a neat gimmick. And was interesting for the first 40 or so chapters. The use of a video game system is just so uninspired. It was very cool the first ten times it was done. Then when the ten thousandth novel using a video game system turns up you just roll your eyes and wonder for the milionth time why a fantasy world has a system that spouts lines of computer-logic loading messages and such as if it's a computer, rather than some fantastical magic thing like some spirit and more difficult to quantify powers. The character design is okay-ish for this site (which isn't a high bar), but the characters themselves are so... Flat. They don't act or speak like real people. In fact they don't speak very much at all. A conversation in this 'novel' seems to largely consist of one character saying a sentence or two, then another character saying a sentence or two. They never have much depth to their discussions. The way they are written, you have to imagine this world being like a video game where things just stop happening while a character speaks, because nothing is described as happening when they do so. Story development is alright. Average I'd say. I can't comment on pacing, I don't know where the author will go with the story as updates continue. Another big tip for the author: Work on expressing your character's thoughts and feelings more. Imagine you have someone watching them, stood right there. What does that person see? What does your character observe? What do they think and feel about things that they don't vocalize?