Review Detail of Tonyorobsky in Phone App: Portable Armory

Despite the flaws, it IS entertaining. -The grammar need some work. -The story is fast paced, and there is no clear goal for the protagonist aside from following the basic requirements of the app use. Chapter 3 contradict chapter 1 concerning the number of users. Not enough curiosity about the app, or the other users. Too much focus on the guns and battles. 1 everyday is pushing it too much, especially in the same city/area, and the lack of downtime, not even for bullets wounds. -The protagonist is lacking. He turned from an ordinary student into a mercenary with basic training without any reason. He became some capable of killing in cold blood and handle bullet wounds on his very first mission. It looks like it’s the same for the other app users The main girl is bland, and for someone who he is supposed to know for a while, their interactions are cringeworthy, like it’s the first time they are spending time together. -More physical description of the people and surroundings (especially the battlefields) would be nice. There is a surprisingly big bullet hole on a reinforced vehicle and it’s not described.