Review Detail of Froya_ in hunting in beacon hills

author here, can someone refer me a translator. I'm trying, I have good ideas, but the translation is making things more difficult. the pace can seem slow, because I'm focusing on creating a good relationship between the characters. this is my first time writing, any constructive criticism is welcome. as for grammar, I'm trying to solve that. I gave myself five stars because that's what the authors do, isn't it?