Review Detail of HowAreYouFeeling in Paragon of Sin
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I really like the story which is why I'm going to write a review with some advice for the author. The cultivation system he seems to be using is typical cultivation (qi circulation) + the use of some sort of qi element system where qi is divided into different elements and sub-elements like violet lighting. The cultivation system is very detailed with each sub-realm (9 so far for qi condensation) as detailed as other major realms in other novels. For combat there seem to be use of spells like elementary lighting art- thunder step. There also is some sort of karmic luck system where luck is assigned at birth and subtracted from for every "lucky" occurrence. There isn't any way introduced to increase your luck although it can be "stolen". These factors all make me very excited. However, I do have concerns for the future. 1) If minor realms are so detailed already, what about 10 major realms down the line each with their own minor realm. How will you separate the realms instead of falling into the trap of reach realm is just the MC becoming more OP blc plot. 2) Keep the elements consistent. Introducing new elements is fine but if elementary qi is a thing, be creative and design cool applications. Make new things like naruto and ninjutsu. Don't just have the MC become standard I punch you harder and I sprout BS so I win. Use the element system. Have drawbacks to balance out possibly 3) Karmic luck should be consistent. Don't make the MC too OP and then nerf him. Have luck be an advantage or a disadvantage. KEEP THE RULES consistent plz. Don't backtrack. 4) For spells be innovative like with elementary qi. Have combat be interesting with unique spells like jiraiya's hair thing. (idk why I'm only drawing up naruto stuff). And PLZ have spells be progressive. What do I mean? Have spells initially weak develop into stronger spells as the MC's comprehension expands. Have the system progress as the MC does. Don't leave hanging plot threads. This creates character development and something I don't think enough authors do. For my review. I wish updates could be faster. The world background needs to be fleshed out more for a 5. Everything else is as good as your going to get on this site so far.
Paragon of Sin
KevinAscending
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I've never thought too in-depth on combat variations and mostly applied the norm of the cultivation concept of stronger cultivation and/ foundation = win, but this has given me a lot of think about. While there are already 200+ chapters created @ this stage, I will definitely try to integrate more variety into it, especially when combat becomes the norm. As for the major nine/ten cultivation realms. I haven't decided on if I'll hammer down on this concept on nine, or until I reach the climax of the story I wish to tell(After all, cultivation is usually an endless adventure, and the conceived end just means a new beginning AKA there's always something greater). Each sub-realm is detailed, every major realm is diffficult to reach. You won't see unnecessary power creep that's commonly seen in genre-similar novels, or at least I'll limit it the best I can. However, MC will always be OP(Within reason). That being said, I want to thank you. You've really made me reflect on variety of powers. I'll definitely try to expand on that, gaining inspiration from whatever mediums(such as naruto ;D) that I can, while instilling the novel's laws into it. So again, thanks. I already have a few ideas.
Author can you make a glossary chapter for the cultivation realms as well as other unique elements of the novel ? Its hard to keep track of them while going deeper and deeper into the story. That way we can refer back if needed .
KevinAscending:I've never thought too in-depth on combat variations and mostly applied the norm of the cultivation concept of stronger cultivation and/ foundation = win, but this has given me a lot of think about. While there are already 200+ chapters created @ this stage, I will definitely try to integrate more variety into it, especially when combat becomes the norm. As for the major nine/ten cultivation realms. I haven't decided on if I'll hammer down on this concept on nine, or until I reach the climax of the story I wish to tell(After all, cultivation is usually an endless adventure, and the conceived end just means a new beginning AKA there's always something greater). Each sub-realm is detailed, every major realm is diffficult to reach. You won't see unnecessary power creep that's commonly seen in genre-similar novels, or at least I'll limit it the best I can. However, MC will always be OP(Within reason). That being said, I want to thank you. You've really made me reflect on variety of powers. I'll definitely try to expand on that, gaining inspiration from whatever mediums(such as naruto ;D) that I can, while instilling the novel's laws into it. So again, thanks. I already have a few ideas.