Review Detail of Tirirism in My Vampire System
Review detail
The author wanted to do something great but ended up making a story that requires you to put the brain away from your body. The world is unbelievable. No society would exist for long if it functioned the way the society in this story functions. There aren't any relatable characters, just trope manifestations. Could have been a good story but it's a shame.
My Vampire System
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Yeah, the world building is kinda incomplete. It feels so much like how Unordinary world doesn't feel complete. This world is far better than Unordinary's own though at least we are given the general heirachy layout as an example. That brings me to something else. I've not gone too far but the power levels between each level seems too weak. I just finished the part where they fought Truedream's top guards in other to save Peter Nd Erin. Even if Quinn's power is different, I wasn't expecting him to do well with a person on the level of personal bodyguard for the head of a top family. Then Quinn is too lousy about bring careful with secrets. Maybe he got too comfortable because the people that finds out his secrets have never betrayed him yet. I'm talking about the part when he helped Peter learn the transformation ability
The society seems a bit harsh, but when I recall what the ruling class of the ancient roman empire did during their apex? Well, then this novel don't appear unrealistic at all. There was this emperor (Caligula) that invited the generals of his army to parties only to sexually abuse their women. Everyone that didn't show up with his wife got on his bad side and could start packing his stuff and flee the country. That emperor and his bois basically raped the wives and daughters of his underlings and the empire somehow survived that ordeal without a war breaking out XD
If you didn’t remember the world was going through a war with another race unifying them until said war is actually over they are now in a very short time of peace that will be broken very easily, which is the only thing keeping the society together(the threat of said war) this society would never work if it wasn’t for the fact that they may end up going to war very soon and they can’t afford fighting among them selves, also I find that there are a bunch of unique aspects in this novel such as(the way abilities world, the originals, the different planets/colonization aspect, i like the multiple personalities in a character that is not to be named, how Layla is a vampire fanatic, etc) and that’s just the unique aspects there’s also the cliches and tropes done very well, like the system, or the power level system, heck even the school has its unique system of power and responsibility with the generals and such. Let’s not even get started on how great the updating frequency is while also maintaining a great quality, and how every character isn’t forgotten and giving decent development. I’m conclusion this novel doesn’t deserve this low review.
What i found strange is that they jump from sergeants as teachers, to generals as head of a year. Normally i would expect sergeants to maybe teach classes, lieutenants / captains to be in charge of a "year" and maybe a major or colonel to be in charge of the school, but this is just how a normal army would do it, Generals are way too important to put in charge of such things, they have underlings for that.
Carlos_Leonelli:If you didn’t remember the world was going through a war with another race unifying them until said war is actually over they are now in a very short time of peace that will be broken very easily, which is the only thing keeping the society together(the threat of said war) this society would never work if it wasn’t for the fact that they may end up going to war very soon and they can’t afford fighting among them selves, also I find that there are a bunch of unique aspects in this novel such as(the way abilities world, the originals, the different planets/colonization aspect, i like the multiple personalities in a character that is not to be named, how Layla is a vampire fanatic, etc) and that’s just the unique aspects there’s also the cliches and tropes done very well, like the system, or the power level system, heck even the school has its unique system of power and responsibility with the generals and such. Let’s not even get started on how great the updating frequency is while also maintaining a great quality, and how every character isn’t forgotten and giving decent development. I’m conclusion this novel doesn’t deserve this low review.
yeah, bro but Caligula reigned for less than 4 years and then got assassinated... and it isn't all that true what you said...
LordRhyolith:The society seems a bit harsh, but when I recall what the ruling class of the ancient roman empire did during their apex? Well, then this novel don't appear unrealistic at all. There was this emperor (Caligula) that invited the generals of his army to parties only to sexually abuse their women. Everyone that didn't show up with his wife got on his bad side and could start packing his stuff and flee the country. That emperor and his bois basically raped the wives and daughters of his underlings and the empire somehow survived that ordeal without a war breaking out XD
One_Punch_Boyy:yeah, bro but Caligula reigned for less than 4 years and then got assassinated... and it isn't all that true what you said...
First of, the dude got assassinated. Second, this is supposed to take place right after our time. They are a civilised modern society so don’t compare it to Rome lmfao.
LordRhyolith:The society seems a bit harsh, but when I recall what the ruling class of the ancient roman empire did during their apex? Well, then this novel don't appear unrealistic at all. There was this emperor (Caligula) that invited the generals of his army to parties only to sexually abuse their women. Everyone that didn't show up with his wife got on his bad side and could start packing his stuff and flee the country. That emperor and his bois basically raped the wives and daughters of his underlings and the empire somehow survived that ordeal without a war breaking out XD
Yeah, but he did survive a couple of years I think ^^ (that is what I meant) But anyway, Ancient Rome is a good example for a flawed system and so on. The Western Modern World right now is pretty much behaving like Ancient Greece in many ways - in my opinion.
FiendStar:First of, the dude got assassinated. Second, this is supposed to take place right after our time. They are a civilised modern society so don’t compare it to Rome lmfao.
In all honesty, i get your point, a lot of people like it. My take on that is that you can compare this to junk food, the lowest tiers of junk food. Not trying to be mean or something, but apparently you seem to think that the novel is good. As he told you, it really is not and you should try and figure out what to do to improve the novel and you as an author. You will have this kind of audience only here, where people don't care about jarring plot holes or mc's with questionable decision making. Cheers
JKSManga:it's okay I'm glad you took the time to try it, it's not for everyone but a lot of people like it.
hmmm... he survived because it would cause unrest in the population if the emperor was killed right after becoming one and Rome might would have been questioned so the left him alone for the population to adapt and because in the first years of reign it's difficult to kill an emperor if there ain't a successor
LordRhyolith:Yeah, but he did survive a couple of years I think ^^ (that is what I meant) But anyway, Ancient Rome is a good example for a flawed system and so on. The Western Modern World right now is pretty much behaving like Ancient Greece in many ways - in my opinion.
Dude, look at Full metal alchemist Brotherhood on MAL, I assure you youll find low ratings in there as well. Imagine having 5 stars on all 1000k+ reviews, that feels contrives and fake even if I wote something close to Ice and fire, I would even start to doubt this site if that happened to me.
Carlos_Leonelli:If you didn’t remember the world was going through a war with another race unifying them until said war is actually over they are now in a very short time of peace that will be broken very easily, which is the only thing keeping the society together(the threat of said war) this society would never work if it wasn’t for the fact that they may end up going to war very soon and they can’t afford fighting among them selves, also I find that there are a bunch of unique aspects in this novel such as(the way abilities world, the originals, the different planets/colonization aspect, i like the multiple personalities in a character that is not to be named, how Layla is a vampire fanatic, etc) and that’s just the unique aspects there’s also the cliches and tropes done very well, like the system, or the power level system, heck even the school has its unique system of power and responsibility with the generals and such. Let’s not even get started on how great the updating frequency is while also maintaining a great quality, and how every character isn’t forgotten and giving decent development. I’m conclusion this novel doesn’t deserve this low review.
HotRedFlaming:Dude, look at Full metal alchemist Brotherhood on MAL, I assure you youll find low ratings in there as well. Imagine having 5 stars on all 1000k+ reviews, that feels contrives and fake even if I wote something close to Ice and fire, I would even start to doubt this site if that happened to me.
Carlos_Leonelli:Honestly I was just bored and felt like dismantling other people’s arguments.
There is a large debate over if a lot of the **** said about Caligula is over exaggerated or made up to smear him as he was very much against the elite class. For instance him wanting to make his horse his consul was most likely him saying "even a horse could do as good a job as you" and when you start looking at stuff from this angle the situation becomes less clear. Its been a while since I've done any reading on him so my memory is a bit fuzzy and I've forgotten quite a bit. just remember historical sources are biased so don't always trust everything they say.
LordRhyolith:The society seems a bit harsh, but when I recall what the ruling class of the ancient roman empire did during their apex? Well, then this novel don't appear unrealistic at all. There was this emperor (Caligula) that invited the generals of his army to parties only to sexually abuse their women. Everyone that didn't show up with his wife got on his bad side and could start packing his stuff and flee the country. That emperor and his bois basically raped the wives and daughters of his underlings and the empire somehow survived that ordeal without a war breaking out XD
That is true. I don't take much stuff seriously anyway since the first historians that wrote about it were heavily biased. But I sometimes use him as an example nevertheless ^^
TrueTinker:There is a large debate over if a lot of the **** said about Caligula is over exaggerated or made up to smear him as he was very much against the elite class. For instance him wanting to make his horse his consul was most likely him saying "even a horse could do as good a job as you" and when you start looking at stuff from this angle the situation becomes less clear. Its been a while since I've done any reading on him so my memory is a bit fuzzy and I've forgotten quite a bit. just remember historical sources are biased so don't always trust everything they say.
No dumbass, it’s not that it isn’t for him. It is that your story doesn’t have intelligence in it. Half the stuff doesn’t work. It isn’t because of preferences, it’s because you don’t put in any effort and just beg for votes. You force the plot to go how you want and don’t care about what your ‘fans’ say.
JKSManga:it's okay I'm glad you took the time to try it, it's not for everyone but a lot of people like it.
